Date: Aug 08, 2019 5:41 pm Title: PROLOGUE... AT THE END...
Nichelle, I am so sorry that you feel criticised and that I have upset and annoyed you. Please accept my sincere apologies and I do love and appreciate your writing. I promise I will keep further comments on story content to myself. I agree with you I will stop reading this story and concentrat on your others.
Thanks and sos again,
Deb L
Date: Aug 08, 2019 5:17 pm Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD
thanks for update, however I had to start to read it again from the beginning because I forgot most of it becase it tok so long. Please dont let your fans hang there
Date: Aug 08, 2019 11:44 am Title: PROLOGUE... AT THE END...
Thanks for the explanation of some of my niggles with this story.
I know it would be easy to just go with the flow and enjoy the story but I'm not built like that. I have always really got deeply into a story and noticed inconsistences within them that really bug me and to some extent, stop me enjoying the story as fully as I could. I am the same with books, TV and film, and online stories!
I have noticed some timeline probs with many fanfiction stories that are long, multichaptered and written over time. I understand that this will always be the case as these are not edited by publishers as a whole entity at the end as books are, for example. As I don't write them I can only try to imagine how difficult this is!
I'm sorry as I do love all your writing and don't want to appear critical and will just try to ignore my brain. However, it still states in this story that Chris was given money that Michael had embezzled from Justin's rage monies and rage was still after the bashing, as this story also has Justin explaining how difficult it was to create Rage with his hand problems after the bashing. And it still niggles me. That's all I'm going to state about that so we'll leave it there.
This is all really moot as, I much prefer JTTOU and SOWK anyway!
Thanks for listening,
Hugs & x
Deb L
Author's Response:
Thanks for commenting. I really do appreciate the feedback. But that said, I'm going to suggest from now on that you don't read this story if it bothers you for two reasons:
The first is that this story provided a vehicle for SOWK and JT2U to even be written in the first place. The writers of QAF had inconsistent timelines all the way through the series, and there were a lot of storylines left feeling incomplete. So unlike some authors, I choose to move the timelines in each of my work that's semi-canon based so that it makes sense to not only me, but the readers. If that's not your cup of tea, then okay. But don't knock them for doing what they feel is correct to do for THEIR story.
The way your mind works is not how theirs spins a story. Please remember and respect that.
Secondly, a less confident author would have found your comments thus far less encouraging, especially in terms of THEIR vision for their work. Nothing in this literary world- fanfic or not- says that you have to keep reading a story that you don't like, agree with, can lose yourself in and ultimately enjoy. Fortunately, it isn't like school where there are homework assignments on boring subjects that you have no interests in, but must be pushed through to move onto a higher grade. I write the way I want to, and if the readers enjoy it, that's all to the good. But to be constantly criticized and 'advised' based on your own preference is not only inappropriate, it's downright hurtful in a lot of ways- or at least it would be to anyone but myself.
Throughout my career as a whole, I've had to develop what is called VERY thick skin. I've learned to take the con-crit nuggets from any work I do, and apply or disregard it accordingly. That isn't the case for most of the people who write on these sites. So whereas this particular comment doesn't bother me personally, the one you left on SLA really did. I didn't respond on that work simply because I needed to formulate a response that wouldn't seem as if I didn't appreciate the rest of the comment, even if that last parting shot rankled.
So here it is in reference to ALL my work, and that of others anywhere. You cannot tell a person when to start a story (be it old or new), what to write, or when to write or not to. As a reader, I enjoy all the new work simply because the fandom won't stagnate and die out. However, anyone who knows me- both as an Administrator and as an Author- also knows that I FIRMLY believe in an author's right to write their story as they see it. It's very easy for the public to criticize what they don't really understand, yet benefit from.
There are many hours, days, weeks, years, tears, tantrums, and other emotions that go into producing this free service for entertainment purposes. It is not to be devalued based on a reader's ideal situation. So saying, if the story itself is bothering you, a simple 'thanks for writing' will suffice, and you don't have to complete the story. But please allow an author room to grow, and move within the storyline as THEY see fit. As for this story itself, the recently posted chapter explains just where the money came from, and as stated, it was still Justin's money.
I hope that you continue to enjoy my work, all the way across the board. But if not, I will treasure the con-crit you gave me throughout your comments and grow from there.
Best Wishes,
~Nichelle
[Report This]Date: Aug 08, 2019 8:15 am Title: Chapter 32: NO EASY WAY OUT
I don't even know where to start...
Idiocy doesn't even begin to describe Michael. All he admitted to! Holy Crap! Did they actually pay Hobbs to BASH Justin, or was it the intimidation and maliciousness during school? If they paid him to DO the bashing, HOW MUCH did they pay him? Then he so stupidly signed everything over to Justin not even knowing what he was signing! hehe
I'm starting to see similarities to J2TU, yet they are so very different. And did I catch that Lindsay actually SLEPT with Chris? How old was he? Can they get her for statutory rape? And she actually paid him? So, they can get her for that (as if they didn't have enough with everything else.) Clarence is the best thing that has ever happened to her!
“Look, she said that she paid him to burgle the loft and to make Boy Wonder’s life worthless. I didn’t realize that she also fucked him to…”
And DEBBIE!! My god!!! She's willingly giving up Carl and her new life all for that little ingrate she calls her son. Wait until she finds out Michael signed her house over to Justin!!!
Altrujism?? Seriously? Oh my god, Nichelle! I've heard everything now!
HUGS ~Cathy
[Report This]Date: Aug 08, 2019 6:35 am Title: Chapter 31: ENEMY Part 2
Wow! The level of cuntiness of Lindsay is almost beyond believable. I wonder if they can bring the Salem Witch Trials to town for a main street execution?
I think Michael can kiss away his best friend status, and any hope of Brian coming to his rescue.
I was surprised it was the police station that Brian and Justin showed up at. I was sure it was Debbie's when Justin asked Brian why they were here.
It's going to be interesting to see where you take this with the whole Debbie/Mother arc. Since she has already left Michael to his own vices and gone off with Carl, I do have to wonder if she will stick to her guns, or if she will play 'My son is not responsible', once again.
HUGS ~Cathy
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 7:48 pm Title: Chapter 28: YOU GIVE LOVE A BAD NAME Part 2
I want to thank you for the comedy routine. Molly's a little spitfire... kind of like Justin was when he first started coming around. I was trying to figure out how old she would be... possibly 13? She had a pretty good mouth on her though. I could almost hear: Molly! Language!!
I hope Jennifer cleans the account out leaving a balance of $5.00.
It was funny Nancy going up to confront Lindsay... but you know, it might have been funny to have had Clarence go up... ENOUGH!!! Stop acting like a two-year-old!!! And quit being jealous of a nineteen-year-old! But that's okay... It sounds like Annette has a vendetta against loosy. I did forget to comment on Lynette's "Falling into it."
Well, I had a few good laughs last couple of chapters.
I think I better lay down for a while. I've been up all night and day reading.
HUGS ~Cathy
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 4:41 pm Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD
I was hoping Debbie will finally admit that her son is guilty, but then, she is on her way to "absolve" him and blame Lindsay, even after what he just admitted!
She is beyond recovery (not sure it's the correct term though, but my English is not great today)!
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 3:49 pm Title: Chapter 26: TOXIC- My Little Secret Part 3
Wow, lady! This is GREEEAAAATTTT!!!
Good thing Daphne was close by, because Justin is probably too much of a WASP to hit a female. But, yes, it's too bad Ethan was already gone so he didn't get a punch in there, too. But the kiss was classic!
I can't believe Clarence didn't say anymore to Lindsay than he did! After that playpen and blond boy ass quote! And Daphne is just as much a WASP as she is... where does she get off saying she was nothing and nobody!!! (She must have been thinking how she, herself, is a nothing and nobody!)
But, don't think you are going to get by without me mentioning: Go back to your playpen, Baby... I caught the Dirty Dancing quote right away! CLASSIC!!!!
HUGS ~Cathy
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 2:40 pm Title: Chapter 25: THE BEAUTIFUL ONES: My Little Secret Part 2
OH! This was so good. I just love Daphne in this story. Knuckle sandwiches. Have at them, Doll. Oh., I can't wait for Ms. Slut to get what's coming to her! What a terrible, terrible person she is.
Michael... crap! He started to say that to Justin... well, it's a good thing Ted intervened. Michael would have brought charges against Justin. But Ted sure laid into him. You Go Ted! And then Michael thinking Ethank had a whine to his voice!?! Someone needs to tape Mikey and send him the recording!!! I'm surprised Clarence didn't say anything to him... hmm, maybe he's saving it for Lindsay.
Thank god for Clarence in regards to Lindsay! Nothing like having a vendetta against someone that is the cause of you losing your friend. Hell hath no fury... only this is not a woman scorned. This is by people she has used and abused. I CAN'T WAIT!!!!
HUGS ~Cathy
Date: Aug 07, 2019 1:06 pm Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD
thanks for update
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 11:39 am Title: Chapter 24: MY LITTLE SECRET
Otherwise, I hope Justin deals well with everything, and I hope Brian remembers how it feels to be with Justin vs some nameless trick, and also remembers Dijon's wise words.
HUGS ~Cathy
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 10:12 am Title: Chapter 23- UNFAITHFUL
I want to start by saying chapter 22 was beautiful.
Chapter 23... I'm so glad Phoebe bared all to Daphne and that mel is on her way over... but Mel already knows everything, unless Phoebe has some other info that's missing.
Hmm... maybe Ethan won't be going to Harrisburg afterall.
But HOLY COW!!! Who's the voyeur?!
On to read...
HUGS ~Cathy
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 8:20 am Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD
It would had not come this far if Deb had realised how immature, whiny, manuplated Micheal is. Looks like she still not ready to see full mirror. Micheal raging, fuming is always a bliss. Great!
So glad to see your update. Kudos to your writing. Hugs â¤
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 8:05 am Title: Chapter 21: GIVE ME THE REASON (Melanie and Others)
Okay, I was a little sick listening to Ethan's inner dialogue. *shudder* *vomit*... enough said. Except... he's a fool to think he has a "WIFE" in Justin.
Michael... I sure had a smile and chuckles with the going-ons in the Diner. After he left, and his inner musings... was another mouthful of *vomit*. But if he thinks his life will get better when Brian gets back... there just might be another punch when the truth comes out.
Lindsay... What can I say? Disgust... BUT... I'm looking so forward to what Ron has planned. Has he also set Clarence in place to 'help' him with Lindsay?
I can't wait for Michael to get the email. I'm almost tempted to jump ahead, but I don't want to miss any of this story,
HUGS ~Cathy
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 7:15 am Title: Chapter 20.3 REFUGIO de AMOR (You Are My Home) the FIRST Date Part 3
I just read the three 'date' chapters. They were so perfect. You have a knack for writing the newness and awareness of them discovering love - or in Brian's case, the realization of it. The day and the evening was so exciting to read. Tears in a few places... the background you created for Brian. And yes, I can see him - for all his bravado - never trusting Lindsay or Michael with the revelation. I'm so happy he trusted Justin with it.
One of my guilty pleasures when reading QaF stories, is Justin remembering the prom. You wrote it beautifully. I could almost hear the 'awe' in Justin's voice when he said: I remember.
I'm so glad Dijon set Connor straight. What an arrogant sleaze. And I smile thinking of Brian's 'dressing down' to Connor. Touche!
And yes, the someone/someones are going to have the hell of a vicious blond before long.
Fantastic Story!
HUGS ~Cathy
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 4:00 am Title: PROLOGUE... AT THE END...
I loved the smackdown Todd gave Deb.
[Report This]Date: Aug 07, 2019 12:05 am Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD
Deb needs to be in a cell right along with Michael, Lindsay, Craig and all the other cohorts she is just as bad as they are.
Cause she expects everyone to remain in their place and the moment they go against her demands she yells and bullies to get her way.
Michael isn't stupid he is just lazy and conniving when it comes to what he wants and needs Deb raised him to be a Spoiled Selfish, Inconsiderate Brat so she deserves to lose everything too.
Deb knows Michael isn't innocent but if she doesn't have to admit that he will is not to blame for his predicament then she isn't alone.
Too bad like Michael and Lindsay's plans it is backfiring Big Time and she has lost everyone who would've stood by her and helped her which is Her Fault.
Deflecting blame to Brian and Justin won't change the fact that Michael's hands aren't just covered in a little dirt but they are buried ten feet deep and will Never be clean again.
Talking to Lindsay won't change anything cause despite hearing the truth from Michael's own lips Deb will keep her head buried in the sand waiting for her baby to come home to her loving arms.
Deb doesn't understand love she just understands control which Michael learned at her knee.
Way To Go Ma!😡
Thanks For the Update 😃
[Report This]Date: Aug 06, 2019 11:53 pm Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD
Hi Nichelle, Hope all is well with you. Great chapter. I love how you can make Michael out to be such a shit. Wonderful writing as always.
[Report This]Date: Aug 06, 2019 10:42 pm Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD
I always thought parents were supposed to teach their children right from wrong, not just side with them no matter what.
Date: Jul 27, 2019 8:07 am Title: CHAPTER 41: ONE LITTLE SLIP
Hi, just reading back a few chapters. Could you help clear up some confusion.
I noticed that in this chapter Chris Hobbs is confessing to his harassment of Justin etc and how Michael and Lindsay paid for it & that Michael used Justin's money, the money Michael embezzled from Justin's share of Rage. But wasn't Rage conceived way after Justin was harrassed at high school and bashed? So how could they pay Hobbs with Justin's Rage share when that money didn't even exist then? Also Brian's burglary was way before that too. And Ethan came on the scene not very long after Rage started, so how did they make that much money from it so fast? Please note, in this story it details all the problems Justin had with his hand creating Rage so it had to after the bashing.
Please help as my brain is starting to singe around the edges!
Thanks
(confused) Deb L
Author's Response:
A few of things you should remember when reading ADLS:
First thing is that although part of this is set post-Stockwell, I'm adjusting the timelines so they make sense. Part of doing that is providing gap-fillers, suppositions, and rewriting scenarios so that they are completed. I've also brought it into the current time, as opposed to 2002-2003, when it was first done. If you noticed in the beginning, Red Cape Comics was a lot more technologically efficient; they actually had mainstream paraphrenalia (dolls, cups, t-shirts, and the like). Also, there's live streaming, which is how Lindsay got caught in her numerous affairs in the car, and they were able to spy constantly on Brian, which wasn't even thing back then; just a theory. So moving the timeline to the time in which I began writing this, suits the story in this way.
However, in terms of storylines, the one thing I've always noticed about the show in general is that they would produce an idea, and then rarely followed it all the way through to the end of the actual storyline. An prime example of that was the whole bashing arc (which is the basis for SOWK). But it's a blessing in a way, since their neglect- for lack of a better term- is the fanfic world's gain because it's allowed so many stories to be transformed in some way or another.
The second thing is to remember that Craig Taylor is also involved in all of this. Michael and Craig shared a common goal; to get Justin returned to his household, and out of Brian's life entirely. And that's about I can say right now, since it will give away the plot going forward. However, rest assured that it WAS Justin's money used to facillitate the burglary of the loft, and it didn't necessarily have to be from the Rage profits. For example, lest we forget that Michael had access to Deb's house where Justin was living at the time, while Craig still had access to who-knows-what. Keep that in mind.
And the third thing is to just kick back and enjoy the story itself. Don't get too caught up in comparing the show to my work, because then you really will get confused. A small word of advice though: Although ADLS and JT2U are similar in plots, they are taking two different tracks; be careful not to confuse the two of them. They both jump in and out of canon, but they also move timelines, and are full of what-ifs and alternate universe storylines. It's all about being able to do it seamlessly, so that it feels like the storylines should have been there all the time, and are at last complete. Just thought I should put that out there...
HAPPY READING,
~Nichelle
[Report This]Date: Jul 06, 2019 3:06 pm Title: CHAPTER 45: SHAKE IT OFF
Love it when a plan comes together. Lindsay is in the soup. The kids are going to have so much fun.
[Report This]Date: Jul 06, 2019 10:43 am Title: CHAPTER 45: SHAKE IT OFF
Very interesting turn for Lindsay's parents: never too late!
Finally, Mel made THE decision she should have made a long time ago; maybe she wasn't ready for that and neither was Leda.
I love this one: "I would hate for the battery companies to start sending you offers to invest".
[Report This]Date: Jul 06, 2019 7:40 am Title: CHAPTER 44: NO HOLDING BACK
Amazing fireworks! I love when they have no restraint and let everything else go!
These quotes are my favorites:
"personification of a human octopus"
"to get to his pulse-pounding pillar of gratification"
[Report This]Date: Jul 06, 2019 1:54 am Title: CHAPTER 45: SHAKE IT OFF
Wonderful update. As always, amazing writing. And, Lindsay in trouble always makes me happy.
Date: Jul 06, 2019 1:20 am Title: Chapter 19: FOOL'S GOLD
First to start... just a little flaw in Lindz' area of inner dialogue: Michael was not with the guys on Liberty Avenue the night Justin and Hobbs had their confrontation. Michael and David were fighting about finances that night. But... artistic license and all that crap... (I probably shouldn't have said anything.)
Lindsay is bat shit crazy. (I'm not touching that one anymore than that. Because if I start I won't quit!) 🙃
If Deb moves in with Carl... Who is going to be responsible for the mortgage she just took out against her house?
Michael and Ethan... *shudder*.... although, they DO deserve each other, and as Brian said, there are double headed dildos... THAT should help bring them together!
Back to Lindsay... her gig is up... but, by LAW... I can't see where she will have any claim to the babies... right?
HUGS ~Cathy
Author's Response:
Hey Cathy. Just reformatting/ editing to reflect more of my writing style as it is today, and came across this. Lindsay's eggs were used; Taryn is just the incubator.