Date: Dec 13, 2019 1:37 pm Title: Chapter 23: Panic at the Disco
Hi again! It‘s really great to see, that Justin‘s doing fine in spite of all his issues! At least until this day... I feel very happy for him, that he successfully graduated and works in animation!
Unfortunately Lindsay will never change. she just can‘t leave it and has to make such careless (or not so careless - ?) comments. Fortunately, there‘s Mel who then makes up for it. Funny that you let her say nearly the same as Brian a few moments before!
Jeez, terrible how this really nice day ends. And how tragic that they‘ll now have to spend their anniversary day in the hospital again! Did you think about that while writing? Was it intended to happen that day?
„I looked at him again and he blinked. For whatever reason that clinched it for me" - Oh dear, Justin sends a cry for help in this terrible state and luckily Brian can understand him so well even in this situation.
Just two more chapters left... I feel already so sad!
Author's Response:
Thank you again for your thoughtful review! Yes, we are hurtling towards the end.
Justin is doing well and I got to give him the job he said he wanted in 101, which made me very happy.
Lindsay is... she has very specific ideas about life and people. I don't think it's intentional that her comments are insults dressed up like compliments but who knows. Mel is her saving grace. I've always thought Mel and Brian didn't get along both because Lindsay set them up to be jealous of each other (or at least Mel jealous of Brian) but also because they're too similar to really get along.
It wasn't intended for the trauma to happen on their anniversary. Although I imagined this all went down after midnight. I needed it to happen in Pittsburgh and a few years later and I tried to think what would bring both Brian and Justin to Pittsburgh and Gus's birthday made sense. He hadn't been in much of the story so far so I also wanted to show Brian being a good dad.
[Report This]Date: Jun 29, 2019 5:44 am Title: Chapter 23: Panic at the Disco
I'm very worried about Justin's safety, both physical and mental.
Author's Response:
I know, me too. Don’t worry - I love him. I love putting him through it but I also love making sure he’s safe and cared for.
Date: Jun 29, 2019 2:20 am Title: Chapter 23: Panic at the Disco
great chapter- so happy to see an update- worried aobut Justin- catatonic- almost
Author's Response:
Ding ding ding! You guessed it. He is catatonic. Another update is coming soon!
[Report This]Date: Jun 29, 2019 1:45 am Title: Chapter 23: Panic at the Disco
You would stop at that point. Now we have to wait to find out what the problem is!
Author's Response:
I did have to stop at that point since the next part is going to having Brian feeling things and he’s an unreliable narrator for his own emotions. We need to pull in an outside POV!
[Report This]Date: Jun 27, 2019 8:14 am Title: Chapter 23: Panic at the Disco
I’m with Brian, this seems really bad. TAG
Author's Response:
It is really bad and I love torturing Justin. Thank you for reading!
[Report This]Date: Jun 26, 2019 12:29 pm Title: Chapter 23: Panic at the Disco
Oh no, cliffhanger. But, I have to admit as annoying as they are, they keep the story really interesting and the readers waiting for more. Wonderful writing.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Cliffhangers do keep the reader engaged but my other motive is that I had to switch POV. Brian's worried and he's an unreliable narrator of his own worry so we need someone else to take the story from here.