[Report This]Date: Aug 31, 2019 1:16 am Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
Hi Tag. Just started reading this. I love it when you try something completely different. I can see this is going to be a quite mysterious story, with a touch of otherworldliness about it and, maybe, a whiff of conspiracy. Excellent!
I know what you mean, trying to *write* dreams must be very difficult, but I'm sure with your talent you can pull it off! (no pun intended).
As for synonyms, I kind of like nebulous or indistinct myself. Or maybe that's just my personality. LOL
Thanks
Deb L
(amorphous is also a good one)
Author's Response:
Ooooo - such delicious adjectives. I'm so excited to use them... LOL. TAG
[Report This]Date: Aug 30, 2019 1:08 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
You're doing a great job with the dream seqences. Then you have the feelings if hatred first Mikey's directed at Gus. Then Claire's directed at Brian. Yeah, the mystery does deepen.
[Report This]Date: Aug 30, 2019 1:08 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
You're doing a great job with the dream seqences. Then you have the feelings if hatred first Mikey's directed at Gus. Then Claire's directed at Brian. Yeah, the mystery does deepen.
Date: Aug 30, 2019 8:15 am Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
Justin will go crazy with all his dreams. Who is the baby? Is he dreaming of Brian's life before they meet? Many mysteries in this story, it's good even if I go crazy too! Thanks for the update.
Date: Aug 30, 2019 2:24 am Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
OK, so now I'm completely confused about the baby! If it is Gus, why would there be so much evilness surrounding him?
I don't blame Justin for being knocked a bit off balance by Brian's intense gaaze in church!
Date: Aug 30, 2019 2:00 am Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
Is Justin having visioñs a la Mysterious Marilyn? A soothsayer? Why so many "daydreams" then? Does he have powers that are letting themselves become known now that he's getting older?
When he dreamt of Brian holding the baby, that was Gus and they were all at Debbie's. Could it be a glimpse of the future? The baby he feels animosity towards, it seems he's channelling Michael and all of Michael's jealousy towards Gus. We all know Michael doesn't like anyone take Brian's attention away from him.
Boy, Justin really has his hands full.
[Report This]Date: Aug 30, 2019 1:02 am Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
Hazy is good. Great chapter. Wow, this story is powerful in a good way. Terrific writing.
[Report This]Date: Aug 29, 2019 10:38 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
Well, now you have me confused. I was thinking that being Justin seemed to have a connection with the baby, that it had to be Gus. But why would he hate Gus? And Justin doesn't come from a poor family, so how could he be jealous of what the baby will have? So, now I'm wondering just who the baby in the carriage with the see-through plastic is.
Then, once again, Claire was mentioned... I know, I'm just speculating...
The church... was Brian at Christmas Mass? I'm still thinking Brian is kind of aware of Justin's 'power'... and they are connecting. But, does Daphne know about Justin being an empath?
Father Francis... I thought it would be Father Butterfield. Maybe then Brian wouldn't mind going to church.
Loved the jealous Mikey... criminy... he's even jealous of baby Gus! (keep it coming!) Makes for humorous reading!
I love all the mystery surrounding this. Thanks again for the quick update.
HUGS ~Cathy
[Report This]Date: Aug 29, 2019 8:37 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
Being an empath is not easy. Hope Justin able to figure out what is going on or going to happen. I like the dream sequence. Who is this mystery person Justin see it through?
Daphne's great friend, but Daph, Jus don't have any baby fetish. ðŸ˜Lol, their banters are amusing.
Kudos to your writing. I enjoyed reading it. Looking forward for More. ⤠:)
[Report This]Date: Aug 29, 2019 7:40 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Out Of The Ordinary
It's getting really weird! Poor Justin, his northern head is going to explode!
Is Justin having flashbacks from Brian's early life and seeing moments happening in the present?
One great thing is that Daphne is here and I love that!
A few adjectives I found in Reverso: foggy, vague, fuzzy, blurred, misty, blurry, unclear, nebulous, cloudy, faint, muddled, obscure, smoky, muzzy, uncertain, veiled, indistinct, ill-defined, dim, confusing, mixed-up, garbled, confused, confounded, murky, turbid, unconscious, ambiguous, imprecise, muddy, loose, bleary, clouded, shadowy, cloaked, opaque, overcast, smoke, dark, addle, cloud, smoggy, filmy, atmospheric
Author's Response:
Ooooo - thank you for all those lovely adjectives! TAG