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Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 11, 2025 3:33 am Title: Chapter 15

So, Mikey had a REAL party. You just never know how he's gonna be written. That was nice since Chase was there.

I think Brian and Chase will be good friends. Which is nice. 

Ouch on paying the credit card companies. Lots of money down the tube. Someone should use some physical violence and psychological pressure on Kip to find where the money is it. Actually, I'd think the police should find references to offshore accounts. Kip couldn't store all that in his head.

Very good story. I liked the mystery involved.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=



Author's Response: Thanks so much.

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 11, 2025 3:05 am Title: Chapter 14

The spelling of the party, to me, spells ~ D.I.S.A.S.T.E.R. 

Why does Michael want to have a party out of the blue? Especially just learning about Chase and the possibility of a half-brother.

Hmm... is Brian's birthday coming up, and Brian has forgotten about it?

If the Kinney's are not anyone Brian thought Chase should associate with ~ I'd say the same goes for Brian's friends. 

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 11, 2025 2:48 am Title: Chapter 13

If the father's name on the birth certificate says JOHN KINNEY, Jack couldn't be the father. Birth certificates have to have the exact name of a parent. No nickname. Same goes for Social Security cards and wedding certificates. (This info is something that I dealt with growing up.)

It's around a five-hour drive from Pittsburgh to Philadelphia. I thought meybe they went by plane. That's like spending the day driving. 

So it's more than likely Kip. If so, and it seems Kip might get the boot from the agency, that's a very big incentive. I'd like to know how Kip came about getting enough info while in Brian's loft. Especially passwords. I can't see Brian leaving a passwrd laying around, when they are all the same. No reason to write it down when it's so easy.

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 11, 2025 2:22 am Title: Chapter 12

Way to go, Gus! I think he was right to have that remain a secret between him and his daddy. I somehow don't see Mel or Lindsay seeing it that way. ;)

I like how Brian sees the value of Ted as both an employee and a friend.

I always wonder how both Brian and Justin can be ready for sex at any given moment. No matter what they're doing, or how tired they are. :D

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 11, 2025 2:06 am Title: Chapter 11

I certainly wasn't impressed with Jack from canon. Brian didn't look anything like Jack, and by the way Jack looked, I certainly never thought he could be a lady's man.

Aah, baby Brian pictures. We've only ever seen a couple of pics when he was younger. Not much out there.

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 11, 2025 1:51 am Title: Chapter 10

Michael is soooo pathetic! He's rude with all his comments. He acts like such a jealous child sometimes.

I am glad that Brian had a chance to mention a few things to Chase. I was afraid that Chase had confused things at the restaurant that day.

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 11, 2025 1:38 am Title: Chapter 9

Brian needs a blanket or sheet in his bottom desk drawer, or under the cushions, or in his private bathroom ~ it would be better than wrecking the cushions.

Michael... just reading his name makes my stomach clench. Whiny baby. I kind of like that a lot of your stories don't feature him past a mention here and there.

I knew Ted hadn't said anything to Emmett. 

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 10, 2025 6:27 pm Title: Chapter 8

I'm glad Brian toned down his anger toward Justin. No reason to add more fuel between them when they have so much other stuff to deal with.

Then we have Michael. I could almost hear: But I'm your best friend.

I hope Brian won't jump all over Ted. Doesn't Ted have to be discreet about Brian's finances?

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 10, 2025 5:58 pm Title: Chapter 7

Since you mentioned Kip, should these people be added to that list? Bellweather, Brandon, or Ethan?

But do any of them have the smarts? 

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 10, 2025 5:04 pm Title: Chapter 6

I think Justin would be insulted if Brian tried to give him money for Gus' trains.

Chase just went up in my eyes. I think Brian had better explain to him just WHY he wouldn't want to be associated with the Pittsburgh Kinney's. 

What an ass Joan was. WHY would a child of hers even consider bringing a bottle of liquor to their alcoholic mother? Especially when she was drunk all the time when they were young children, and didn't try to protect them from Jack?

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 10, 2025 1:03 am Title: Chapter 5

Just because Coltrane said he and Stockwell go way back ~ doesn't necessarily mean they are good buddies. It could be just the opposite.

Sam Spade sounds good. However, I was surprised he'd already been on the job for two months. About wondering if Brian had PAST boyfriends, it reminded me when the loft robbery happened, and when asked if anyone had been there, Brian pictured all the men coming through the door. 

With the dollar amount, shouldn't the FBI be in on this? 

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 09, 2025 11:37 pm Title: Chapter 4

I was wondering if Brian's personal checking/savings were also hacked. But I think that would be a little difficult to do. I'm sure the bank would have contacted him.

The bank in Philadelphia ~ could they access camera pics, and do handwriting analysis to show that this person is not Brian Kinney? 

You have given no clue who this person is. I can think of a handful of people we know from canon, but I'm not sure which one, or if you're bringing in an orig character.

I really hope Chase isn't involved with this.

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 09, 2025 9:55 pm Title: Chapter 3

At least Brian told Justin the truth about what was happening and let Justin share his burdens. 

I hope they go the route of a PI. They definitely need to get someone staking out the post office. As soon as they see someone access that box and take a pic of them, they should be able to get this solved. 

Curious to know if all the credit on those cards was taken out in cash. I don't see that happening, but what kind of purchases could be that much?

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 09, 2025 9:26 pm Title: Chapter 2

OH NO! This story's plot is bizarre. Probably not for the reason you might think. About six months ago, my best friend and I were putting together a new story plot. Believe it or not, it was a case of identity theft.

We came up with a lot of information on identity theft and how much a person would be responsible for. Then I posted the question on FB-Legal Fiction, where a handful of attorneys will answer questions. You pose the question to them, give them the date and place. (Pittsburgh 2005) And they relate the info to what you're asking. When the site opens, there is a warning that this is for fiction only and not legal advice.

In the US, if identity theft is proven, you are not responsible for any credit card charges, and you're not responsible for any debt incurred on fraudulent new accounts opened in your name without your permission.

Of course, taking these things into account, it might be boring if Brian didn't care about this.

Is this Chase Hammond doing this? Is this a ruse?

I'm really looking forward to the rest of this story.

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jul 09, 2025 8:55 pm Title: Chapter 1

When I read the summary, I was thinking it would be Justin who was stolen. Thank god for small favors. 

What's up with Chase looking so much like Brian? Are they long-lost relatives as Cynthia said? 

Reviewer: Thyme Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2025 6:03 am Title: Chapter 1

Thanks for commenting - always appreciated.

Reviewer: Suse Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2025 5:41 am Title: Chapter 1

Just  read this little gem. Recommended by another reader. Great storyline. I was hoping there might have been a sequel to at least find out what happened to Kip and did Brian get his money back? Thanks for sharing your talents with us.

Reviewer: cullengirl08 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 02, 2023 3:05 pm Title: Chapter 15

This was a great story and I was hooked from the start. As the story progressed and more things started coming out, Kip was on my list as well as one of the suspects and I'm glad he was caught.

Author's Response: I love mystery stories, so I'm glad you enjoyed what I wrote.

Reviewer: Maxsmom Signed [Report This]
Date: Apr 14, 2022 4:27 am Title: Chapter 10

Mikey is such a weenie….still acts like a high school kid

Author's Response: You got that right.

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 04, 2017 7:33 am Title: Chapter 15

I really liked the ending. Especially because it's not a perfect scenario you left us with. It makes the whole story more real. Great work. 



Author's Response: Thanks so much.

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 04, 2017 6:58 am Title: Chapter 14

Well, Justin and his ass can be very persuasive. 



Author's Response: Yes they can!!!!

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 04, 2017 6:50 am Title: Chapter 13

If Kip lost his job because Chase went to Brian for a new campaign that would be more than enough reason to try to ruin him. 



Author's Response: For sure.

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 03, 2017 6:28 pm Title: Chapter 12

Ted really is great help. Brian is lucky to have him on his team. 



Author's Response: Ted makes a good friend.

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 03, 2017 6:12 pm Title: Chapter 11

Somehow I hope that Jack cheated. I think it would be nice for Brian to have a brother. Also the interaction between him and Joan was surprising but in a good way. 



Author's Response: Glad you think so.

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 03, 2017 5:49 pm Title: Chapter 10

This was the perfect way to get Michael of his back. 



Author's Response: Glad you think so.

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