Date: Jun 29, 2018 9:27 am Title: Chapter 5
Again, there are many known scenes in this chapter, but I think you make them so much better. You let them talk more to each other and it becomes clearer and clearer how much Justin already means to Brian. It’s so beautiful to see how much they care about each other.
I was a little bit afraid of the prom, but I think when the prom will happen, they could be so much stronger than in the show. And, you change some things, for example Brian not going to the leather-ball or Justin not starting a fight with Hobbs in front o Woody’s… By changing this things, you change the future.
Just like you wrote “Inescapable” from Brians point of view, you wrote this story mainly from Justin’s and I think it’s great, but it would have been also really interesting to get to know some of Brian’s thoughts or how he went through some experiences.
Warmest regards!
[Report This]Date: Feb 27, 2018 8:39 pm Title: Chapter 5
Brian eating the kiddie cereal made my heart all squishy ahhh :) Justin is allowing him to do things he's NEVER done before and not making a big deal out of it.
Also, the way Justin reacted when Jack came to the loft and Justin threatened to crush his foot if he didn't move? PERFECTION. No one messes with his boy ;)
Date: Feb 24, 2018 7:02 pm Title: Chapter 5
I loved how Justin reacted when Jack barged in the loft and also how he dismissed Chris on Liberty avenue because Brian needed him and was openly asking for his help.
Date: Feb 24, 2018 6:40 am Title: Chapter 5
I'm really liking your story. Such a good read.
[Report This]Date: Feb 23, 2018 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 5
Love the changes you've made. I never really got the club thing, it didn't really serve a purpose to me. Since Justin didn't do what he did to Chris does that mean Chris doesn't have a reason to hit Justin with a bat?