Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 11, 2018 12:45 am Title: Chapter 9 - Time To Chase Chase?

Before I start, right above the picture of the mens loafers, you wrote, "Meanwhile, Brian and Quinne went on a fantasy shoe shopping extravaganza"...  it should be Brian and Qianna.

Also, standing in line to get into the Apple Store, Qianna said to Chase, "I'm really glad you're going to me (should be 'be') in my group, though."

 

I really enjoyed this chapter. I was wondering if a jealousy issue would arise between the girls after reading the last chapter, and they both seemed interested in Chase. I have to wonder if Quinne texted that message on purpose. Seems like it. 

You mentioned Qianna saying that she wanted them to spend the few weeks together... how long have they been at camp, and how long is left?  I loved that they traded fathers during this wedding crap. Qianna hates Alex so much, that she wouldn't be able to even reply or make a suggestion to Justin.  Where, pray tell, did you find such a truly horrific picture of a corsage?

Thanks for the update. Looking forward to the next chapter.

XOXO ~ Cathy

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 10, 2018 2:36 am Title: Chapter 8 - We Have To Tread Lightly

Thanks to Gus, they have confirmation that Brian and Justin knew each other.

 

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 08, 2018 3:15 am Title: Chapter 8 - We Have To Tread Lightly

Hmm... If Brian didn't get Quinne until she was three months, and Emmett had said NOBODY was aware of Quinne until Brian brought her home, that must mean nobody is aware of Qianna. Because if Debbie or Emmett were aware of her, I hardly think they would have let Justin go off and stay in California. So IMO, I would say Brian and Justin aren't aware that their daughter is a product of a twin. Which leads right back to Lizette. Why didn't she contact Brian until three months after the baby was born? Had she planned to keep one? Since Justin was her friend, maybe she gave him one, and kept the other. The girls would have had to have some very significant different features that Lizette could tell who was who. Hair color changes so easily when a child is a young baby.

Anyway, good to know Gus still remembered Justin. But too bad it didn't lead to any other disclosure, except for a time-line verification.

So, who's this Chase kid?  Seems like he is playing the girls against each other. Or does he honestly like both of them as he can relate to each of them, but in different ways?

Stella is a great friend. Her enthusiasm really wears off on a person. She's found the perfect DNA test, so now all we have to do is sit back and wait for the tests to arrive. Maybe Brian will find this charge just as important as Prada.

Thanks for the update. Looking forward to the next.

XOXO ~ Cathy

Reviewer: Glo Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 08, 2018 12:44 am Title: Chapter 8 - We Have To Tread Lightly

And the plot thickens even more. That Stella is a very smart & creative girl! Glad the twins have her helping them.

Now Gus....I hope they decide to tell him soon but maybe he'd get mad at Brain & the girls would rather they confront their dads and not Gus. Hmmm this is so great! 

Reviewer: wellreadbunny Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 07, 2018 11:18 pm Title: Chapter 8 - We Have To Tread Lightly

Ok. I don't know why they separated  , but I can guess about the girls. They think there is only one baby and Justin will raise it  . Babies are born . Justin gets his daughter , the only one he thinks.  The surrogate  kept Brian's as her own,  maybe ? Her husband made her give the baby to Brian and since three months had gone by Brian thinks Justin did want the baby and gave it back.

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You're getting warmer . . . LOL. TAG

Reviewer: bksbracelet Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 07, 2018 12:29 pm Title: Chapter 7 - Let's Try and Figure This Out

Another little clue and more questions I think the dads are going to be harder nuts to crack

Reviewer: Toto_too514 Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 07, 2018 3:11 am Title: Chapter 7 - Let's Try and Figure This Out

Hmmm... so the boys really don't realize that the girls are twins???? But the girls' names are so similar and very unique. That can't be a coincidence. And why would it be 3 months before Brian got custody? I don't trust the mysterious Lizette... even though she was apparently a friend or acquaintance of Justin's. Could she be the source of all the problems? Is she playing a con game? Could she even be the reason the boys separated? Curiouser, and curiouser.

On a side note, was Lindsay's sister's name on the show Lisette? 

Good for Emmett! He's a man of his word! 

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 07, 2018 12:10 am Title: Chapter 7 - Let's Try and Figure This Out

Okay, nice list the girls have going. Also, they came up with the idea that Brian and Justin didn't know about there being twins. They should have asked themselves, "How would they not know?"  and if they were already broke up, "How did each father get one of the twins?" But then again, if Quinne was three months old, how old was Qianna when Justin got her?  It's a Mystery! 

So Emmett only spilled a few beans. What does Gus remember? I'd say that's their next best option. Gus was apparently really close to Justin, and at six he should remember Justin. And I pretty sure he would know when Brian got a sister for him. Or, they are going to have to find Lizette, or pump Justin for more information.

Well you've got intrigue going. I'm thoroughly enjoying the story. Thanks for the update, and I'm definitely looking forward to the next one.

XOXO ~ Cathy

Reviewer: mamab Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 06, 2018 9:10 pm Title: Chapter 7 - Let's Try and Figure This Out

I like it any way that you write it.  When I read it, I feel like I am on a roller coaster waiting for the next climb or fall.  This is so good that I am ranking it up there with Time Blitz and you know that I loved it beyond belief.  Fantastic writing.  I feel like each chapter is a cliffhanger and can't wait to see what it next.

Reviewer: marie-france Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 05, 2018 8:19 am Title: Chapter 6 - They More Than Knew Each Other

Why all these secrets ?I can't wait to see how the girls are going to deal with their fathers. Maybe Emmett can help. I can't wait for the next update. Wonderful chapter.

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 05, 2018 1:04 am Title: Chapter 6 - They More Than Knew Each Other

Good work.  I'm thinking that Emmett is the week link.  If they can get him to talk then all will be reveiled.

Reviewer: Glo Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 04, 2018 9:50 pm Title: Chapter 6 - They More Than Knew Each Other

The pieces are coming together very nicely. I don't think our boys even know about their other daughter. I hope they find Lizette quickly so they can get her side of the story. Maybe she was a cunning woman & tricked them somehow. I want to know when & how our boys split up & why they couldn't get their heads out of their asses & make their family work. Hmmmm the plot thickens. 

Reviewer: bksbracelet Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 04, 2018 9:16 pm Title: Chapter 6 - They More Than Knew Each Other

Nope not a science nerd so this was quite interesting it certainly provides the evidence the girls needed. I feel impatient waiting for the chapters lol