Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Dec 11, 2018 5:20 pm Title: Chapter 11 - Love In The Afternoon

Oh, a good mystery with a hidden staircase! I bet that staircase was used by the owner for escaping his wife and meet his lover. If there is an access from Brian's apartment, it must exit other accesses on other floors. Where is Watson when we need him!

I'm surprised that Brian is petting the cat if he is so "allergic" to anything that can give him OCD reactions.

Justin is getting more and more comfortable and that doesn't bother Brian too much. His brattiness is playing good on Brian.

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 29, 2018 6:02 pm Title: Chapter 11 - Love In The Afternoon

51,117 Words - in 23 Days!  Can't begin to tell you ladies how very proud and impressed I am. That's a hell of a lot of writing! And Oh-So-Good! It has all facets of good writing: Mystery, intellect, funny as hell, a love story, and a great Plot Line. All which keeps me so engrossed while reading. You can also tell that a lot of research has had to be done, prior to writing this. So, Congrats!

I do have to wonder if a dishwasher would be satisfactory to Brian regarding dish cleanliness. What with the temperature of the water, and nobody contaminating them by touching them, I would think he'd really like one.

We had a naughty Justin in this chapter. See anything you like? Yes, poor Brian would have about passed out from sheer embarrassment. I also think Justin is portraying conceited tendencies with his cute, little twink body. But, oh boy. Brian will have something to see in his dreams tonight when he goes to bed, or uses his trusty condoms, prior to sleeping. But it will be fascinating to see how he finally gets in Brian's bed. (That DOES happen, right?) But our dear Brian had to put his foot in his mouth by asking Justin what he wanted to do, and then Justin brazenly looking at his crotch. Even if Brian could get past his issues, of famly, grandfather, etc... Could he have Justin touching him, kissing him, what with his OCD?

I have to admit laughter ensued reading about Justin finding the 'broken wall', and Bill's plight into looking through it, and Brian's demands to the cat, or reading of Justin's broken ass. You gals have to quit doing this, or I'm going to have to quit reading these chapters with other people present in the room. My daughter had just laid down on the couch five minutes earlier. Yeah, I was unappreciated, even as I had tears of laughter leaking out of my eyes. 

First, even looking 'down the staircase', it gave me the willies. I have an unnatural affliction to heights. I asked my doctor once about acrophobia, but I CAN at least make myself go some places, so we kind of ruled that out. But you won't even get me up on a ladder. Needless to say, if Bill went down the hole, I'm going to bet on him being okay. My granddaughter's cat fell off a building one time, and she read an article, where a cat survived falling 32 stories. So, Bill will be okay.

You asked our opinion on the staircase's outcome. I think with Justin's help, and Brian's curiosity, he will make a concerted effort to make it down. What will they find? I think your story summary speaks for itself here. I'm assuming the remains of Jay and his lover. Is it Andrew, or the mysterious B.?

LOVE, LOVE, LOVE this story!

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=

xxxxx

It was the most peaceful I’d felt, probably in my whole fukcing (fucking) life.

 

 

 

Author's Response:

Cathy, thank you as always for your review, we look forward to them so much. You always have such wonderful things to say. 

 

Regarding Brian and a dishwasher - here’s the thing, OCD is a very funny and complex disorder.  I should know (Sally) as I have dealt with it ever since I was about fourteen years old. I’m a lot better now, but a lot of what we are writing about Brian comes from my first hand experience with the condition. Logically I know a dishwasher would be better and less gross than me washing up by hand - but OCD stops you thinking logically. In my mind, I could wash up better. I didn’t trust the machine to get things clean. So that’s how we have Brian dealing with it too. It just makes sense to me to write him feeling that way - maybe to someone without OCD it just sounds barmy and honestly it is a little. I hope this makes sense and explains things a little. We are a bit behind on replying to reviews, so I will try and go back to avseee some of your other questions. 

Thsbk you again got your continuous support.  Sally & TAG. 

Reviewer: mamab Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 29, 2018 1:31 am Title: Chapter 11 - Love In The Afternoon

Fantastic chapter.  I am so fascinated by this story.  I thought Time Blitz kept my attention, but this one does it even more.  Just love the fact that it is mainly just the two of them and Bill.  Congrats on your goal.  I knew that the two of you could do it.  BRAVO !!!!!!!!!!!!