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Reviewer: Toto_too514 Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 28, 2018 11:58 pm Title: Chapter 11 - Love In The Afternoon

Taylor Tummy Temptation

Just... LOL!



Author's Response:

That's only for advanced pupils, of course, not neophytes like this Brian... LOL. TAG

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 28, 2018 5:33 pm Title: Chapter 10 - Food, Glorious Food!

Ahh, just the title told me Justin got to cook for his man. It also referred to how much Justin likes to eat. ;)  But did you have to have challah bread and full-fat butter? I hadn't eaten yet today, and had to go make some toast with full-fat butter. And's let''s not forget the blackberry jam. Thanks for that, ladies. But, I was so proud of Justin for being so considerate of Brian's OCD to cleanliness, and the time he took to wash himself, prior to cooking. (He must have learned something watching shows about how doctor's prep for surgery. ;) But, I have to admit, it turned out to be the perfect, best first date, ever.

Couldn't Brian get a coffee cup out of his cupboard, and after his ritualistic cleaning, pour the coffee Justin brings him, into it, and then drink it? It seems like such a waste of money, AND good coffee! And even if Justin is able to accomplish that feat, I can't imagine HOW he will get Brian to allow him to shave that beard off. But what a beautiful sight he will find underneath it all.

I loved how Brian opened up to Justin about his family. It really shows character growth for him. And although Justin now knows Brian's name, I just love it when he calls him Eggy/Egbert. And I have to interject that everytime Justin describes/refers Brian's face, I would love to see a photo-shopped picture of him. And speaking of 'photo', that picture of 'William' you posted, had a 'Younger Gale' look to it.

It was nice to see an appearance of Bill again, and know that Justin has finally won him over. 

Well, I'm caught up now, which is kinda saddening. I really like this story, and can't begin to tell you how much I love Justin's musings.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^=

xxxxxx

bratiest (brattiest) voice ever.

the room just seemed to exude an ideal of impenetrable weath.(wealth)


Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 28, 2018 2:44 pm Title: Chapter 9 - Green Eyes

All I can say, is THANK YOU JUSTIN!  You gave the slimy chin rat the heave-ho. Definitely was LOL, again, (much to my daughter's dismay).

about just how small and useless that piece of fluff between your legs - the one you think qualifies as a penis - really is. Oh My Ever-Loving-God! You got to love Justin, don't you? And I just can't imagine Ethan - Strutting. And where the Hell does Ian get the idea he's such hot stuff, that Justin will come running back to him, begging for his forgiveness? Ethan makes himself sound like some type of god, or something. Gotta wonder what planet he's living on. Besides, Ian, you don't hold a candle to the guy in the Triangle Building.

I love how Justin refers to Egbert as 'His Man'. For knowing him less than a week, he's apparently quite taken.  Which apparently, the non-filter lips, spewed out. And, yes, Egbert's job sounds truly horrifying and boring. I've always wondered who wrote those inane, little user manuals. Some products really do not need anything enclosed. Now I can thank Egbert for them. ;)

xxxxxx

A couple of comments:

“I can see that. What are you working on” (no punctuation at end of sentence.)

(And, although this can work either way, I thought I'd point it out.) “What are you doing in here, Ethan?” I angry (angrily?) whispered.

Great, great chapter. Does Justin really get his way, and is allowed to cook? I suppose it's inevitable, if he uses his impish smile.

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^= 

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 28, 2018 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 8 - One Evening

Finaaly was able to start reading again. I've had so much on my plate lately, and just decided to wake up early today, and start reading.

I liked the camaraderie between our boys in this chapter. For knowing each other such a short time, they've already developed a good friendship.  It was interesting Egbert received condoms in his grocery order, as that was something I was goingto point out, was how were our boys suppose to get 'together', if Egbert can't stand to be touched? I can only imagine that he uses them when he jacks off, you know, bodily fluids and all that.

I do have to wonder why he doesn't want to tell Justin his name though. And I found the dubbed, Sunshine amusing, as we've never been give THAT reason for his nickname.

Well, on to the next chapter,

{{{Big Hugs}}} Cathy =^..^= 

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 27, 2018 4:23 pm Title: Chapter 10 - Food, Glorious Food!

Justin was less bratty and very patient: he made Brian progress in the right direction.

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Nov 27, 2018 3:02 am Title: Chapter 10 - Food, Glorious Food!

I am amazed.  With Justin's help Brian might just come around.

Reviewer: mamab Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 27, 2018 2:32 am Title: Chapter 10 - Food, Glorious Food!

Fantastic chapter.  Could practically taste the food.  Great pictures.

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 25, 2018 9:26 pm Title: Chapter 9 - Green Eyes

Excellent! From Daphne and Justin, then Justin and Ian and the last part with Eggy and his new boyfriend! Congrats, you did great, ladies! The brat and the loner are very entertaining.

Reviewer: Toto_too514 Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 25, 2018 1:51 am Title: Chapter 9 - Green Eyes

Definitely like me some bratty Justin! I love his description of his secret weapon smile and nose scrunch, LOL! I know I wouldn't be able to resist!

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Nov 24, 2018 3:13 pm Title: Chapter 9 - Green Eyes

Hummm, it all depends on if Justin is a neat cook or a messy one.  He could give Brian a heart attack.

Reviewer: mamab Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 24, 2018 4:44 am Title: Chapter 9 - Green Eyes

Wonderful.  Justin is the perfect brat and like it or not Brian is falling for all his bratty charm.  Fantastic.

Reviewer: NoChaser Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 22, 2018 10:59 am Title: Chapter 8 - One Evening

I love Brian in this. He's still so insecure (to the max), but without the hard edge and walls that the myth he crafted around himself in canon gave him. So many psychological issues but he took his self-preservation in a different direction - he aimed in inward instead of outward. He keeps *himself* away from others rather than keeping others at arms length. Our man Justin will work his Sunshine magic, though, I have no doubt. 

It's gonna break my heart when the inevitable angst springs up between them!

Now, the BIG question - how you gonna convince Eggy to shave off that beard, huh? 

 

Reviewer: Resa13 Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 20, 2018 8:44 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Another Lonely Night

Justin is just such fun in this fic. I love him. I'm so keen to find out what happens next ~ Re  x0x

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 20, 2018 8:12 pm Title: Chapter 8 - One Evening

Justin is getting more and more at ease and to feel what is bothering his MM.

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 20, 2018 7:08 pm Title: Chapter 7 - A Woman Scorned

Teasing, joking, touching: they are on the good path even with the rocky/cold "welcoming".

A small clue of the mystery Justin is chasing; Jay might have been unfaithful to his wife and the worse would have been with a guy.

Reviewer: mamab Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 20, 2018 1:50 am Title: Chapter 8 - One Evening

Wonderful chapter.  As I have said, I love this story and the writing that both of you are doing.  I have felt such a connection to it from the first paragraph and now I think I know why in adddition to the fact that I live 25 miles from Pgh, I was born in Frick Hospital in Mt. Pleasant, Westmoreland Co., Pa.  Henry Clay Frick was also born in Westmoreland Co. in West Overton.  The pictures are a wonderful addition to the story.  I can remember when I was a child seeing steel mills in full production and the sky being bright red from the heat generated from the furnaces.  You could actually smell it before you could see it.  And back in the days of my dating, if a guy took you to Phipps Conservatory, it was a really special date.  Just a bit of trivia for you.

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Nov 20, 2018 1:02 am Title: Chapter 8 - One Evening

Amazing how much he's gotten out of Egbert.  But he's thinking B. is a girl.  I'm thinking a guy.



Author's Response:

Hmmmmm. Have you been reading ahead in my brain? Lol. TAG

Reviewer: NoChaser Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 18, 2018 11:49 pm Title: Chapter 7 - A Woman Scorned

I haven't been reading much of late. Practiclly nothing, to be honest. But when I started reading this, I was soooo excited - a period piece that isn't a period piece!!! Jackpot! And now I find myself feeling so in tune with Brian - excuse me, with Egbert - and all his neuroses. When I got to this part, to his reaction to Justin eating a muffin, I could literally feel his pain. I have a (pretty common, actually) neurosis called misophonia. I have painfully painful visceral reactions to sounds like crinkling paper, eating noises, etc. Once I had to get up and walk out on a college final because the woman next to me was chewing gum. God I wanted to rush him out of the room right then! I don't have many other OCDs that are life interrupting, but that one - yeah, it's painful. 

Okay, just had to say that while it was still beating me up. Now, off to finish the chapter. 

Good Work You Two! 

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 17, 2018 3:55 pm Title: Chapter 7 - A Woman Scorned

So cute; A Jealous Egbert. That happened pretty fast, what with only a few visits. Instant attraction? Or has it been so long since he has seen anyone, that the thought Justin might not come back, devastating  to him? Perhaps it's little of both. It was nice to see him not go postal when Justin shoulder bumped him, and then he managed to do it back. Ah, they are already endearing together.

So the folder held a secret. I presume our myterious B & J are two male lover's. Because, if Alma said she was 'shamed' and he 'violated the marriage bed' and his soul was ruined, I can only imagine it had to be with another man. But I thought we had a 'B' and an Andrew Peeble? Or was the 'A' of the other letter suppose to be Alma? Perhaps I need to wait for further clues. But I have a sneaking suspicion that one of the original men back then will be related to Brian.  But as far as a B & J... I found the initials scarily the same as Brian and Justin.

(Sixth paragraph down): .... I was bordering on hangry (hungry?)  I've been feeling a little funny about pointing out errors, but I figured if you were hoping to possibly publish this book... well, otherwise I wouldn't have bothered you with it. But it's nice to  know it doesn't bother you.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter, and hopefully a closer look into all the mystery guests.

XOXO ~ Cathy



Author's Response:

Hehe, no we don't mind at all. As I said in my previous response, we usually finish reading and editing late at night so we do tend to miss bits... but this time, hangry was actually correct. It's a clever mashup of the words hungry and angry, and an adjective that describes being irritable due to hunger. We think it perfectly describes how Justin would feel when he's not eaten LOL

We are glad you are enjoying our little mystery. The initials are creepy, huh?

Thanks as always for the reviews. We really appreciate them.

 

Reviewer: Deb Tanner Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 17, 2018 7:07 am Title: Chapter 7 - A Woman Scorned

Ohhh, and the mystery deepens! I love mysteries!

So glad that Justin was able to convince him that Ethan was not his boyfriend and never would be. I was worried he would end up kicking Justin out and telling him never to return.

Looking forward to the next update!

*Hugs*

Deb



Author's Response:

Yeah, we couldn't have Ethan sticking around for too long, could we? 

We are so happy you are enjoying our little mystery. Thanks for reviewing :)

Reviewer: Toto_too514 Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 17, 2018 3:30 am Title: Chapter 7 - A Woman Scorned

Curiouser and curiouser! But I do believe Justin is persistent enough to stick with it. I'd love to see Daphne introduced to Eggy... she's just as stubborn as Justin! Nice to see "Eggy" trying so hard to move past his OCD.  

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Nov 17, 2018 1:12 am Title: Chapter 7 - A Woman Scorned

Wow.  B, J & A.  Who are they and how do they relate to Egbert.

Reviewer: mamab Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 17, 2018 12:30 am Title: Chapter 7 - A Woman Scorned

Fantastic chapter.  It is so easy to picture them in each situation.  Terrific writing.

Reviewer: Resa13 Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 16, 2018 11:25 pm Title: Chapter 7 - A Woman Scorned

Just keeps getting more intriguing. Love it!

Reviewer: purpledee Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 14, 2018 6:39 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Taylor The Latte Boy

Okay, which one of you two nutters came up with William Shakespaw? Really?!

You still haven't said why you chose this building, unless it was on social media which I don't use.

Anyway, enjoying this very much, funny AND mysterious!

Thanks

Deb

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