Date: Nov 07, 2018 7:51 am Title: Chapter 2 - Fade To Black
First off, You should have put you P.S. warning at the very top of the chapter. It came a little late when we'd already read it. I really hope voting went well today.
Well, I for one, am very happy that 'Ever Hopeful' was a one-night mistake. That guy makes my whole body cringe. But comic relief he was, as Justin's thoughts of him, and Justin thinking him a 'troll', yeah made me happy and I chuckled. Good thing Justin's got Daphne in his corner. She will welcome the chance to get rid of the chinrat.
Looks like our illustrious Mr Kinney has made an appearance. Will he bring the poor, broken blonde boy up to his apartment? Can't wait to meet him and get his back story. The older, haunted-looking gentleman, with clunky horn-rimmed glasses, with lines around his eyes and with a twist to his mouth. Yeah, definitely want to meet him. Was it the whack to the head, or the shock of the man that caused Justin to lose consciousness?
A couple small errors follow:
Sound(s) like he was a busy guy.
I wish I had the balls to just tell (t)his troll to get lost, once and for all.
Loved the chapter... Waiting forthe next one.
XOXO ~ Cathy
Date: Nov 07, 2018 12:37 am Title: Chapter 2 - Fade To Black
OMG, I am so hooked on this story. You two have that power over me. I voted BLUE so I qualify to read this and hopefully many more amazing chapters. Loved the pictures. Now as for Ethan, I will throw him off any cliff you want, but he will add some interesting plots. Now let me think, could it possibly be Brian ??????????????????
Date: Nov 07, 2018 12:25 am Title: Chapter 1 - Another Lonely Night
Great Start! Looking forward to reading more!
Thank you for reading and reviewing. It makes us so happy to hear how much you're enjoying the story. We can't wait to see what you think about the rest of the story.
~ TAG & Sally
Date: Nov 06, 2018 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Another Lonely Night
Oooh! I like it!
Very mysterious... and I love a young, energetic, stubborn and wide-eyed Justin.
Hmm... I also love a good trivia question. Gonna have to do a little research on that building!
YAY! We are so happy you like it - we can't wait for you to see where we go with this.
Isn't stubborn, bratty Justin the best?
Thanks again for reviewing.
~ TAG & Sally
Date: Nov 06, 2018 2:32 am Title: Chapter 1 - Another Lonely Night
ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL !!!!!!!!!!!! I see another Time Blitz in the making. The pictures were a great addition. And, I feel so honored that we exchanged DM's while you were in Pittsburgh researching the story. Even the addition of the rain made me think of you having to tour the city on a rainy day. And, I didn't miss that the description of "the ghost" really matches a real life person that we all know and love !!!!! Please tell Sally that I am so happy that the two of you are working together. You make a fantastic team. Can't wait to see where you go with this fantastic idea.
Date: Nov 06, 2018 2:14 am Title: Chapter 1 - Another Lonely Night
Okay, Ladies... Right out of the starting gate, and you have me hooked.
I'm thinking Brian and Justin haven't met yet; e.g. Daphne told Justin he needs a boyfriend. That saying, I'm wondering if Brian will be the mysterious building owner, and that's how they meet. Or is the old man going to have a link to Brian? Or is the "older, with a sense of longing there - maybe it was in the lines around the eyes or the twist of the mouth", Brian, himself? I love mysteries, so I can get carried away at times, and I'm probably letting my imagination run wild. Sorry if I'm speculating about nothing that has to do with your story.
In that one sketch there was a face looking out the big end window on the third floor.I officially got the chills.
So very happy to see that Daphne appears to be a major character in this story. I always loved their friendship, and thought they underutilized her in the series. She was a much better friend to Justin, than Michael was to Brian. I was so happy when they brought her back in Season 5, but saddened when the last time she was present, the rehearsal dinner, she didn't even speak to Justin. Anyway, getting off track here. I found a tiny error:
If I didn’t make that bus, then there wasn’t another one for a half hour.
Loving the story, and happy you chose to write this and share it with us.
XOXO ~ Cathy
Date: Nov 05, 2018 7:56 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Another Lonely Night
Spooky and intriguing! Thanks for this new adventure with Daphne, my favorite girl!
We love Daphne too - it's always good to have her up front and center in any story. Thanks for reading! TAG & Sally