Reviewer: Maxsmom Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 25, 2021 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 41- Progress

I just started reading the story 2 days ago and dint realize you started writing it 2 years. That explains a lot of the inconsistencies. I love the story but it’s a bit confusing. Some chapters it appears that Mikey is married to Ben but the last chapter mentioned Mikey using Brian to pick up tricks. Also it’s only been mentioned once that Gus has a sister...but she’s never at Debs and it doesn’t appear Mikey is the father. Finally, Brian wrecked his Jeep and bought a new one a month ago, but this last chapter mentions Brian picking up Gus in a BMW.
It’s just little things that I guess got forgotten along the way.

Author's Response:

Mikey can still be married to Ben but Ben isn't mentioned as he doesn't really enter in the story.  Just because he is married, doesn't mean he can't trick.  AS for the sister, I can see that would be inconsistent-she is never mentioned.  Brian wrecking his Jeep was in the first chapter and I don't remember him buying a new jeep but he did buy a new car.  I apologize if it is a little confusing.  Yes, I have been writing it for several years.  I try to update every two weeks at this point and hope to finish it by the end of the year. There have been times that the posts have been a month or longer in updating.  I will try to go back and eliminate some of the inconsistencies that you pointed out and I do appreciate the feedback.  Otherwise, I hope you are enjoying the story.  

Reviewer: Tagsit Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 23, 2021 9:57 pm Title: Chapter 41- Progress

Cleaver Brian... TAG

Reviewer: purpledee Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 24, 2021 8:58 pm Title: Chapter 41- Progress

To some extent I agree, it has taken quite a long time to get Brian only just past 2 months sober, and it's been nearly 2 years.  But I do like a bit of anti-Michael/Lindsay/Mel, so I'm loving this at the mo!

Thanks

Deb L.

Author's Response:

2 years is a long time, but I'm loving the slow burn.  Thank you for continuing to read and comment.  It means a lot.  The story is moving along in the direction we all want.

Reviewer: Nichelle Wellesly Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 24, 2021 11:23 am Title: Chapter 41- Progress

Hey Sandy!!! I really am enjoying this slow burn. It just means that however the story develops, a very SOLID friendship is being built and considering Brian's friendships with his hanger-ons now, it's going to be a GREAT thing. He certainly won't feel their loss as keenly.

 

As for the ending, I seriously hope Brian had the forethought to press a record button before taking the phone from Gus. I would imagine that if Melanie was true to form, the restraining order would be for 'No Contact', which Lindsay violated in her continued quest for Queen Bitchery. If it was, then Queen Twit has just earned the boobie prize; WTG Lindsay. 

 

Anyway, I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter. Splendid job!💜💜💜

HAPPY WRITING and HUGS,

~Nichelle

Author's Response:

Nichelle:

 

I'm thrilled that the consesus appears to be a slow burn is okay.   I just didn't imagine it would take me this long to write the story.  But the muses talk to me and I have to listen.  As a fellow writer, I'm sure you understand that one.  As much as I try to move fast, it just doesn't lend itself to the story.  It will be finished when it is time.