Date: Oct 26, 2019 6:40 am Title: DIVE IN THE POOL
Hi! I have to say a few words again…
In your summary and also in your answer to my review you excused Brian’s behavior in saying he is getting older and knows he’s no longer that club-boy and also doesn’t want to be this boy any longer. But then, already in chapter 1, he pouts when Justin has to go to work and then he has nothing better to do than to go to the club, looking for his next fuck… That just doesn’t fit your description.
He has nothing better to do than to start this whole shit with Nathan, lying to Justin again and again in a pathetic way, instead of sitting down and talking to Justin… not very mature
He’s breaking rule after rule and you say “before, it was always Justin” - For me, that’s no justification. I think they had both learned their lesson through Ethan and what I love about Brian, among other things, is his honesty, so I can’t simply imagine him behaving like this...
When you let them talk, then it’s about some upcoming wedding and in the next sentence who they’ll fuck next. They stumble through their life like brainless idiots just having the next fuck in mind... Not very mature, and so not Brian and justin after S5. And I have to say it again, in S5 they were at a point in their relationship where, despite the spatial separation, their feelings for each other were as secure as never before. And I think it was also clear that Justin no longer had a great interest in fucking other men. An no matter if it had been 5 or 7 years, I don’t believe that someone could change so much, that is a total change of his being.
So, still, in my opinion, you should have tagged this AU or out of character, because that’s not Justin! And what angers me the most about it, is, that you excuse Brian’s behavior with Justin’s character. You deface Justin's character and make him look like a mindless idiot to justify Brian's betrayal.
It's not about doing “fluffy”, it's about respectful interaction with the characters.
I don’t know. Maybe for me it would be better to really stop reading this, but this last chapter gave me a little hope that maybe Brian won’t take the last step, fucking this guy, because he would probably break the last rule and fuck him more than once and then I would have lost my last respect for your version of Brian. I really hope that at the last moment he sees what he is doing and if he would be really as matured as you describe him, he would sit down with Justin and talk to him.
I know, I shouldn’t take it too seriously, at the end it's just fiction, but I can't stand the way you blame this all on Justin, and at no point in your story so far I see Brian telling Justin that he's not content with the way things are between them.
Author's Response: I think this story is not for you. And I am thinking more of you then anything, I don't think it is healthy for you to get too frustrated and angry over a story. I am not being horrible or mean, and I hope you don't think I am, but as a writer, I don't like the idea of readers getting angry or upset....reading is about enjoyment. I have changed the setting so it does say AU and OOC Justin, but that is ALL I am going to do, the story must go on. I don't like to read Mpreg fics and give then a wide birth. I also not interested in the Alpha - Omega stories; I know these stories are not for me and steer clear, but each to their own. You should do the same to this story. Deep down, you care about the characters and that is a good thing, and admire that. I care too, but I do like to twist things out of kilter as well, as you've read! You have to read this if you want to, not because you are curious to see where it leads. I get it. I've been there. I've read stories that make my blood boil and decide not to read or comment, but then, you end up clicking on the story without thinking which drives you around the bend. At the end of the day this is a story and after it's finished, it's finished. Thanks for the comment....or the mini chapter LOL.