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Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 16, 2018 6:40 pm Title: Chapter 31

“He chewed on his lip with the same intensity as Justin did when he was deep in thought” – I love these stories where they have own kids together because  I always imagine a combination out of those two as so cute and the way you describe Munchkin or let him behave is so fabulous. These scenes in the kitchen and later in the bathroom with all three of them is so great, just hilarious but also so cute… “I still don’t get it why you had to eat her” or ““Daddy is a tranny! ”or ““Do you play with rubber duckies too?”  haha :-)

And I’m looking forward to Brian’s birthday! ;-)

 

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 16, 2018 6:21 pm Title: Chapter 30

“So the baby has two hearts?” – Goodness, I’m so in love with your Brian! And he’s so cute with his little Munchkin!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 16, 2018 6:10 pm Title: Chapter 29

Again, such a funny scene with those painted nails… “My usual strong front to the sight of his tears had dissolved no thanks to my rampant hormones” – his usual strong front? Haha… as if!

“He still couldn’t believe how I’ve changed over the years, and truthfully, I couldn’t either.” – That’s why I love your story so much… You have given them the chance to be so happy but also – in my opinion –  let them stay in character! Thanks!

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Date: Jul 15, 2018 7:05 am Title: Chapter 28

“Leo had the genius idea that Keith and I should wear matching outfits” – haha! I love how you picture Keith and Leo! And again, I have to repeat myself, I’m so in love with your writing-style… there isn’t a single scene but the whole interaction between them all and imagining especially Brian in these situations (bursting in tears about a bottle of whiskey and and and) is just fantastic!

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Date: Jul 12, 2018 6:59 pm Title: Chapter 27

“Where were we? Right. New budget for ad campaigns.” – So hilarious and fantastic!

And it’s so clear that the both want a second child so much. Otherwise they wouldn’t have waited until it was too late to do something against it. But I can understand their fear. And I just love this scene at the park – it’s so cute and beautiful!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 11, 2018 5:36 pm Title: Chapter 26

The whole chapter, every sentence is so great, awesome, hilarious… Brian’s talk with Keith, how he discovers he could be pregnant, the scene with Brian and Justin, his reaction, Munchkin. I love the way you let them talk, let them behave and I love your writing-style.

“But if you dare die, I’m going to hate you. Forever.” – As funny as it sounds… I can understand Justin's fears and worries, but he's not exactly so innocent!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 10, 2018 7:57 pm Title: Chapter 25

“This was seriously not a place I’d seen myself almost ten years ago when I met Justin” – I love this, love that Brian is now in this place and what’s the most important thing: he is HAPPY!!! They are happy! And they’ve built themselves such a great family!

“It felt better than ever before…” :-) So hot and so hilarious!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 08, 2018 6:32 am Title: Chapter 24

I’m glad you didn’t stop but let us share their further life. It’s great to see how their life as a family has developed. This way it doesn’t matter that Justin has do go to New York for some time. It’s clear from the start that he’ll come back. So much better than in the show. And they are great dads! I love how they let Munchkin oversleep in their bed although it means no other activities! :-)

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 08, 2018 6:12 am Title: Chapter 23

Would have loved to see this funny scene with Brian, Munchkin and Ted at the office and also this hilarious moment with Brian and Munchkin in the car when Munchkin spits the sucker in Brian’s face. And yeah, also this scene where Munchkin proofs that he isn’t a traitor but an ally when he barfs all over Ethan. Great!

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Date: Jul 07, 2018 4:37 pm Title: Chapter 22

And again, even though Munchkin is a “little traitor”, the three are so great together!

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Date: Jun 21, 2018 3:25 pm Title: Chapter 21

Love these scenes with all three of them! Beautiful moment: “I rested my head against his. “We did well,” I whispered” and then ““My days of tricking are over.” Wow!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 19, 2018 4:05 am Title: Chapter 20

Ah, finally – there he is! I love the way you’re describing Brian in his last pregnant days. “That was another memory I’d rather not revisit—the moment I realized I couldn't see my dick.” Hihi

A week in a coma ?! Justin reacts very calmly. But no matter. The main thing is that they are united again and finally they are all three together!!!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 18, 2018 1:41 pm Title: Chapter 19

I really like “Patrick” but for me it will always be “Munchkin” :-)

The letters Brian wrote are so cute and lovingly and I totally understand Brian’s need to write them. I mentioned it before… I love how your Brian was allowed to develop. Reading this the second time I already know how Justin reacts to them… And I don’t understand it because if something would have happened to Brian I think Justin would have been grateful for having those letters. Warmest regards!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 02, 2018 6:18 am Title: Chapter 18

What’s wrong with Brian? “I need to tell you something. Then we’ll go and enjoy the party”… What did he think? “Justin, chances are I could die during birth but let’s party...  Don’ get me wrong, they have to talk about it, but at that moment, in which Justin’s already nearly a nervous breakdown. Luckily, Keith and Leo – who went through the same –  had been there to help them. And what’s better than hot make-up-sex… They are soooo cute together!

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Date: May 29, 2018 8:18 am Title: Chapter 17

It’s good that they’ve made friends who didn’t know them from before so there are no judging or prejudices. “I haven’t seen two people so much in love in my life.” – I love this scene and I’m glad that Brian has changed so much so he just can accept this statement! “Can the dog rip the bean bag?” :-)

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 28, 2018 5:32 pm Title: Chapter 16

I wonder how nobody notices the pregnancy…. Do they really all just think he’d eaten too much??? But Sheila from EyeConic Optics seems to be too occupied with her problems.

I like Keith and Leo! It was a great idea to create a gay couple which went through the same and which are so similar to them.

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 28, 2018 5:21 pm Title: Chapter 15

In S5 Justin looked so beautiful in his suit. That’s how I imagine him here. I would have loved to see this juice-discussion at Babylon on screen – funny! And I can’t help myself, but even when they fight a little bit, they are still so cute together!

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Date: May 28, 2018 4:49 pm Title: Chapter 14

I’m glad that they finally talked about the prom and Brian’s daily visits at the hospital. Brian’s reaction to the blood shows how much he loved him then and how much he loves him now. Beautiful! Sadly, some things stayed untold In the show although it would had been so important for both of them to know some of the things they had done for each other.

It’s hot how Justin tries to protect Brian and I think Munchkin and his dads are already a great team!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 27, 2018 6:48 pm Title: Chapter 13

With every chapter I’m falling more and more in love with your Brian and Justin. I think you pictured them so well! First, the discussion about Babylon, then the missing condoms and last but not least this situation with the milk! Gloriously!!!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 27, 2018 1:41 pm Title: Chapter 12

I really love this chapter. You let them be so beautiful together, so cute, loving and caring, equal partners. First, their talk about school and Justin accepting Brian’s help. Then, Brian actually spills his heart out, whining and crying. Some of these hormones would had been good for our Brian In the show I think. :-) Then, the way they’re naming the house and last but not least the drama about the tits. So well written, so funny… “Justin! Paper bag! Panic attack!”… “He snatched his hand back as if burnt. “Oh. Oh, shit!” Justin stole my paper bag, lying on the carpet, keeping his eyes shut. He’d gone pale.” Soooo funny! Thanks again for sharing!

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Date: May 23, 2018 5:09 pm Title: Chapter 11

Gus is so cute “How’s my brother” – so great! The interactions between those three are so awesome. Again, very well written. Can’t wait to see them with their munchkin!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 23, 2018 6:34 am Title: Chapter 10

These appointments always bring a big smile on my face…. Just to imagine the look on Brian’s face when the doc tells him: “On the scale”

And I really like the “email-conversations” – it’s so Justin-like telling Brian all this stuff, even the things he don’t want to know about – or pretending he don’t want to know.

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 23, 2018 5:58 am Title: Chapter 9

How cute, this “donut-scene” at the hospital. “You’re like an old, married couple”. It reminds me of this dinner-scene at Debs in S2. They seemed to be so happy and then Brian “destroyed” their happiness with fucking the “zucchini-man”. I’m so glad your story is different, your Brian is different, you let them talk, allowing them to be happy. Thanks!!! This is not the first mpeg-story I’ve read so far, but I must admit I like those better in which Brian gets pregnant. You let him say “it’s not because of peanut, now munchkin”, but I’ve asked myself what would have been happen if it would had been Justin…

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22, 2018 3:14 pm Title: Chapter 8

Here, I just can agree with Brian. I’m also so happy that Justin had decided to come home and that they are able to experience this pregnancy together. Many thanks to Cynthia! Brian would have been too stubborn, wouldn’t he?

The end of this chapter was so frightening – but reading it the second time and knowing what will happen, makes me relax.

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22, 2018 3:12 pm Title: Chapter 7

I just love your Brian… “If the twat got any idea of trying out for a girl…” :-) And also the scene at the store and their interaction is priceless… “Justin’s jaw dropped, then he started babbling.”

I also like how you represent Justin. I think his thoughts about the marriage are very matured and it’s so cute how they change the name peanut into munchkin – although I loved the name peanut!

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