Date: Apr 09, 2017 3:46 pm Title: Chapter 11
Glad that the incident at the girls' anniversary is known. Glad that Emmett decided to kick Michael out. But, Jenny thinks her father thinks about her future. She is in for big surprise!
[Report This]Date: Apr 07, 2017 7:06 am Title: Chapter 11
Wow, Matt's dad is a complete dick. What kind of parent rejects a kid due to a disability?
Yay, Michael got punched! LOL. I can't help it - I'm not a violent person, but I swear!
Sometimes the dialogue gets a bit confusing as to who's speaking, especially when there are a lot of characters. It might help if you tag the dialogue a bit more often (like 'Brian said' etc.)
I'm so glad you had them bring up the anniversary party. It has always bugged me how it just got blown off. That is not something someone says in the heat of the moment unless they are a truly heinous person. To even think something like that requires a level of near sociopathy in someone's mental state, I think.
Ha ha, thank you for not writing a Michael/David lemon! Ewww!
Date: Jan 11, 2017 4:12 pm Title: Chapter 11
Thank you for not including a sex scene with Michael in it. I think I would have puked. I hope Michael will finally get what he deserves.
[Report This]Date: Oct 02, 2016 4:22 pm Title: Chapter 11
Michael keeps getting worse and worse. First he says something nasty about Ben and Steve, which isn't even true. Then he mutters something equally nasty about Hunter and gets a well deserved punch. Then we find out what he did with the money he got from Brian. Invested it with David instead of putting it up for Jenny! That's going to come back to bite him on the ass. LOL. Things must be really bad with David if Hank doesn't want anything to do with him. This story is one of the high points of my day.
Author's Response:
Wow thanks for that, it gives me so much confidence to continue!
The cards are being dealt and the games are beginning. Happy reading.
[Report This]Date: Oct 01, 2016 1:49 am Title: Chapter 11
Michael seems to be sinking deeper and deeper into that hole he keeps digging for himself, I feel so bad for Jenny she is soon going to find out her father is worse than pond scrum.
Michael took money out of Jenny's fund to give it to David? That money wasn't suppose to be touched! He didn't even spend his money, he spent his daughter's! That is some low down dirty Shit to do to your own kid!!
Ben kicking Michael out is a good thing since he never helped to support the family while Ben bent over backwards to do it.
Michael is so selfish and inconsiderate to everyone else he only sees that everyone should take care of him and when they don't wittle Mikey comes out.
I am happy that Brian is not jumping through his hoops anymore just feel bad that Emmett got suckered, luckily he was given the truth and soon Michael will be kicked to the curb where he belongs.
I really do like Matt, Faal and Zee they are very interesting people who are wonderful additions to this family.
I like Steve too and his daughter Taylor is so sweet, adorable totally crazy about Ben who became her favorite quickly.
I can't wait for Michael's world to come crashing around him and for Dave to get what he deserves too.
:)
Author's Response:
Yep Michael is swimming up sh-creek without a paddle but doesn't seem to notice that the boat has a leak...a David sized leak.
Sorry, if I confused you a bit. The money that he gave to David was from the money he got from B&J for the "store" and the repayments from the loan are going to go to Jenny's college fund.
Ah Emmett, I always thought that his southern side was underused in the series, he shows Mikey was an iron fist he has in that velvet glove!
Glad you like the new family, I especially like writing Faal - he just adores the bones of Zee and Matt and will do anything to protect them, but he's not the only one...a little hurricane is coming.
You are right about Jenny...she's going to be so disappointed in her father...
Date: Oct 01, 2016 12:55 am Title: Chapter 11
Tyty another wonderful chapter. I feel like the other shoes is about drop for Mikey. Till next time.
Author's Response:
Welcome and lots and lots of shoes are about to drop on Mikey...hee-hee
Date: Oct 01, 2016 12:22 am Title: Chapter 11
Great update! I'm with you, Mikey needs all the bad that is coming to him. Could't stand him in the show,so imature, selfish and immature. Never understood how Ben could marry him or stand him.
Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response:
Thanks! You and me both re Ben and Michael - how anyone would put them together is beyond me!
Thanks for reading...more karmic ass kicking for Michael to come!
Date: Sep 30, 2016 4:17 pm Title: Chapter 11
Have I mentioned lately that I hate Michael?! Well I do. He's crossed the line now by a mile. It's one thing to accuse Ben of screwing around, making insinuations about Steve, and even Justin. But what he said about Hunter....I literally wanted to be ill. He's lucky he got away with just one punch. I'm just glad Ben already kicked him out. At least now we know it's going to be permanant. And the nerve, thinking he can get 1/2...HAHA! Glad he's getting himself hooked up with David again. We know that's going to go down into a firey mess. he deserves to be caught up in it. I have to admit, I've very wary of David's alternate mitives. I know it's about the $$, but is he aware that Michael's connection with Zee, Faal and Matt? will he find a way to use Matt to get to Zee?
So now that everyone else has heard about David's threat to Zee, how will they all react to Michael seeing him now? Especially Debbie!!
Oh wow...the many paths this story could take. It's facinating!
Oh...and the added bit of Africaans was lovely. My mom was born in S. Africa and would speak a few words here and there. (espcially when she was pissed off) the memory made me smile. Thanks. :)
Fantastic chapter. I am SUCH an enthusiastic reader of this one.
Cheers,
Elaine
Author's Response:
Elaine...you may have mentioned your dislike once or twice.
Yay Matt for giving the punch he deserved and as per usual he thinks he's got away with what he said because he doesn't press charges...well think again Mikey.
David doesn't see the connection between them at all, thanks to Michael's niavete...he's one for dropping his friends when something more interesting comes along, naturally he thinks his friends are going to be there when he wants them back...and watch for Carl and Brian now they know of the threat he made.
Oh wow, I am so pleased that the Africaans created a happy memory for you. You are more than welcome xx
Nicole