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Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 22, 2018 6:03 pm Title: CHAPTER 23: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY Part 2

Nichelle, Thank you so much for taking the time to try to explain it to me, but I'm still slightly confused. If Jacob Levine was Melanie Levine's father, and Jacob and Kevin were best friends, then who was Joan's father? I thought it was Jacob, because I thought that was why Kevin and Jacob wanted Jack and Joan married, as Joan was pregnant by her father (which I thought was Jacob.) Am I making any sense? This is causing my love of mystery and intrigue to falter. Usually, I'm very adept at following through with plot. HELP!

Cathy



Author's Response:

Jacob and Kevin did not know each other. However, they were similar men where their children were concerned.

-Joan's father (whose name wasn't mentioned) and Kevin Kinney were best friends, and arranged the marriage between Jack and Joan to cover the fact that she was impregnated by her own father, resulting in the birth of Claire Kinney. Jack protested, and said that he was already involved with the woman he intended to marry (Melanie Levine). Instead of accepting that, Joan and Jack's fathers had him drugged by Joan so that he believed he slept with her, then married them off posthaste to cover up the incestuous relationship between her and her father- a situation Jack didn't fully discover and understand until after the marriage had taken place.

As for Jacob, he arranged for his daughter to marry someone else, once he found out that she was seeing a man he didn't know nor approve of (Jack). When she protested, she was beaten for her insolence, and later sent to her aunt, Frayda, to correct her 'behavior'. Jacob and Feiga wanted to remember her 'place' and to do her duty to their family, which ultimately meant marrying the man Jacob picked for her without question or opinion. Instead, Frayda and Mendel let her stay with them permanently, not agreeing with Jacob and Feiga's actions towards their daughter at all.

The two situation are separate, yet related because they both affected Jack and Melanie's plans to marry. Hope this puts the story of Jack Kinney and Melanie Levine into perspective for you.

Happy Reading!

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 22, 2018 4:01 pm Title: CHAPTER 23: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY Part 2

Lindsay sure has a few surprises in store for her once she gets done being serviced by Gardner *eew, eew, shudder*   She really is a piece of cake. First with her employment, and lying, unsuccessfully to Dean Maloney. And what a lie! Feigning interest about Justin, which I was only too happy to learn he knew the full truth of the situation, even involving of her and Michael trying to bodily removing Justin from Brian's apartment.

Then she thinks she punishing Melanie for not home and being in Gardner's bed... hehe! (Mel won't care whose bed she's in!) Guess again, Lindsay Dear. Your "wife" is not even home. Neither is your son. And oh right! You better hurry and return to that home, because your "wife" sold that home. If you hurry, and quit sleeping with the guy using you, for his own gain, you might make it back by 4:00 so you will have enough time to rent a truck, get to the storage unit, and pick up your clothing. (all on your own dime, of course)  God how I hope she misses the deadline. I also hope Leda has papers proving the sale of the house on her, but if she doesn't, no big loss, as Leda can have her arrested for trespassing as she tries to move past Leda to get in the house. Also, your plans to get Mel to agree to have Brian pay more child support (which Gardner planted in your mind) is NOT gonna happen. And your only option will be to sign your rights away. And what's this crap she thinks she's gonna get all that she wants and deserves. Foolish entitled bitch, doesn't know shit!

Surprise, surprise, surprise... Justin is a multi-millionaire, and George Schickle's heir. Bet he looks a lot better in your eyes now, Lindsay. And yes, you're not getting that big office up on the main office space. And Cynthia won't be at your beck and call. You will down in the lowly art department. You won't be able to visit all the departments, throwing your weight around. Which you won't even have a job anymore when they all jump ship in two weeks.

Regarding Nancy... I hope her $6K is holding out. Staying at the Hilton, which probably cost about $350 a night for a suite, and having to pay your P.I. for the updated information on Mel and Brian, you're not going to have much money, much longer. And you might have to share costs of living with your daughter in a couple of weeks.

Your impressive back story on Mel and Brian, was brilliant. So, if I have this straight, Joan was Melanie Levine's older sister? So that would make Joan Brian's aunt, and Claire his cousin? And Melanie Marcus is two years younger than her birth certificate states, besides the day and month are also wrong? I'd like to know why Melanie Levine thought it was a good thing to separate her twins? And once Mendel and Fradya knew the truth about Jack Kinney, why didn't they try to get Brian out of there? This whole history of events is going to take some time to fully sink in to Mel and Brian.

So much going on in this chapter. Can't wait to find out everybody's reactions. Has Michael came to, yet? Can you give him amnesia? Because Lindsay needs to be kept in the dark for a while longer.

XOXO ~ Cathy

 



Author's Response:

Hi Cathy. First, thanks for reading and reviewing. It means a lot. To answer a couple of your questions, without giving away the plot going forward:

-Joan has no relation whatsoever to Brian and Mel. She was simply Jack Kinney's wife (now widow) through a forced marriage arranged through Kevin Kinney and Joan's father, who were best friends. Brian and Melanie's birth mother,  was Melanie Levine, who was Frayda's niece.

-In some cultures, back in those days, the male child went with their father to learn the legacy of the family, while the female children stuck close to their mothers in preparation for housewifery duties. Since Melanie Levine's mother and father (Jacob and Feiga) clung to old world ideals, the young woman was raised believing the same.

-Melanie Marcus and Brian are, in fact, twins, although Mel's birth certificate reads that she was born on November 6th 1970, whereas Brian's reads their actual birthdate of June 11th 1970. Jack met their birth mother nearly two years before they were born on the date of November 6th, which they used on Mel's birth certificate. The date was sentimentally chosen since there was no question that the twins needed to be separated. If taken from purely a romantic perspective, November 6th was the date that Melanie Levine and Jack Kinney found love, but June 11th is the date that any love in Jack's heart died since Melanie Levine expired shortly after childbirth.  

-As for why Mendel and Frayda didn't get Brian out of there: they knew Jack Kinney one way through their niece's association with him. However, by the time they found out what was really going on in the Kinney household, what could they have done? They had no rights to Brian. Jack convinced Joan that Brian was their son, while keeping the real facts about Brian's parentage a secret. But the question is did he do a good enough job at it. "The heart has many secrets" is a very true adage here.

 

Stay Tuned!

~Nichelle

 

 

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 22, 2018 1:33 pm Title: CHAPTER 23: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY Part 2

Quite a complex situation with Mel and Brian.

Lindsey doesn't seem to see that Gardner is using her while she's worth it and he will throw her away once he has what he wants.

Reviewer: BlueMyst Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Oct 22, 2018 3:38 am Title: CHAPTER 23: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY Part 2

Holy Crap Jack took his son to be raised by him and Joan only to make that child's life a living Hell instead of cherishing him being apart of his first love.

No Excuse!!!

Brian needs Justin to keep him calm while Emmett and Ted talk him from flying to Pittsburgh digging up Jack and burning his bones and attacking Joan.

Nancy's investigator is hopefully lost in Florida cause Brian and Melanie need time to talk, read the notebooks and figure out a plan.

Lindsay is going to be shocked when she goes home and finds Leda there, her stuff gone, Melanie, Gus, Brian, Justin, Ted and Emmett gone.

Plus she doesn't know Leda is a Wasp lol

She couldn't last a day taking care of Gus but Melanie has been doing fine so far, her plans to bleed Brian dry is a joke just like Nancy's plan to get more of Ron's money.

Lindsay being at Vanguard should be interesting for everyone else but I doubt she will enjoy it, especially being the little fish in a big pond with no power unless she kneels or bends over <giggles>

Lindsay and Gardner Ewwwwwwww!!!

Brain Bleach Isn't Strong Enough To Get Rid Of That Image <shudders>

Gardner could never get Lynette  who is too classy for him and Lindsay will spread her legs for a nickel.

Amazing Update!!!

 

Reviewer: BabylonBritinTaykin69 Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 22, 2018 1:05 am Title: CHAPTER 23: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY Part 2

II can't wait til this is finished so I can put it on my phone now.

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Oct 21, 2018 10:52 pm Title: CHAPTER 23: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY Part 2

Wow.  So much happening.  Learning of Brian and Mel's heritage was unbelievably believable.

Reviewer: Deb Tanner Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 14, 2018 5:15 pm Title: CHAPTER 22: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY

Love this story!

Cynthia and Marci are epic in their drive to help Brian. So glad it wasn't Gardner sneaking into the office. Love Murph for thinking about Justin regarding the computer and that he's willing to sacrifice a bit of his sanity to find out everything he can about Lindsay working at Vangard.

The meeting with Jennifer and Constance was fun and even more fun when Emmett joined them. And now Michael is stalking Emmett!!! Good thing he knocked himself out when he fainted giving them time to leave. Emmett might have needed bail money!

Can't get enough of this story! Looking forward to more!

*HUGS*

Deb

Reviewer: Deb Tanner Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 14, 2018 5:09 pm Title: Chapter 21: HUSTLING AND SHUFFLING

Okay, let me get this out of the way first... Gardner and Lindsay having sex? EWWWW! LOL! Brain bleach please! A very LARGE bottle! LOL!

Well, now I feel better! Whew!

Love what you did with your plot bunny! Brian and Mel are twins!!! And Brian fainted! OMG! I can't wait to find out what happens when he wakes up and then when Justin and the others find out!

*HUGS*

Deb

Reviewer: BlueMyst Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Oct 12, 2018 12:51 am Title: CHAPTER 22: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY

Crap Michael knowing means Lindsay will know soon and she might come to Florida if she actually knew where Mel's parents live <eye roll>

So Is Brian Awake and Freaking Out?

Did Mel call Justin to calm Brian down?

Is everyone else on their way to Florida?

Murphy is smart to follow Brian along with the others because they will love having a job that is stimulating and very rewarding, plus they will be on the ground to Bigger and Better Things.

Gardner is going to wish he left Brian and Justin alone and that he Never Met One Lindsay "I Love Being a Whore" Peterson lol

Lindsay using Gus to hurt Brian, Mel and Justin is not surprising, now the family reunion should be very surprising for Nancy and Lindsay <giggles>

Fantastic Update:)

Reviewer: Glo Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 11, 2018 4:20 pm Title: CHAPTER 22: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY

What?! And no I don't screech like the 'scream queen' lol but how on earth could you end the last chapter with Brian fainting after hearing the news of his twinship and not give us that in this one? Again...what?! I honestly don't know how I'm going to forgive you! Just kidding lol

Cynthia & Marcie: Xena & Gabrielle! Nice!

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 11, 2018 2:50 pm Title: CHAPTER 22: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY

Kinnetik's team is building up nicely with Brian's protégés. Emmett the queen of my heart!

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Oct 11, 2018 1:46 pm Title: CHAPTER 22: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY

Alway's happy to see another chapter on this.  Nice that Murph is ready to jump ship.  Emmett is a delight.  Hurry with more please.

Reviewer: bksbracelet Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 11, 2018 9:29 am Title: CHAPTER 22: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY

Lol great ending of the chapter so amusing. I loved that Brian’s team are working hard behind the scenes and know that Gardener and Lindsay will be screwed yay

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 11, 2018 9:18 am Title: CHAPTER 22: HISTORY, MISERY AND COMPANY

Oh! Thank you so much for this update. It looks like the 'whole crew' is starting to expand more and more. Maybe when Michael comes to, they can convince he must have been seeing and hearing things, and tell him they weren't even at the Cafe. Or hopefully, when he comes to, he will have a giant knot on the head, and temporary amnesia. 

So Murph has the start up computers. That's a good thing, as they should be able to get by on four artists when starting the agency. And if Brian can move the 'best of the best' with him, maybe he won't have to hire anybody outside for a short time. And it would be so great if Justin could get that cosultation job. Also, Calvin Hobbs better stop with that rescinding campaign, or he might be out the board's door.

Jennifer better get to Nathan quickly. Can you imagine how ill he would feel after the fact, if he found out he slept with his half-sister? As Emmett said, "EEEEWWWWW'!

Lookng forward to your next chapter. I'm so very pleased you are feeling better and can start on a normal rotation schedule.

XOXO ~ Cathy

 

Reviewer: BabylonBritinTaykin69 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Oct 01, 2018 11:52 pm Title: Chapter 21: HUSTLING AND SHUFFLING

Please finish this wonderful story please

Reviewer: BabylonBritinTaykin69 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Oct 01, 2018 10:06 pm Title: Chapter 21: HUSTLING AND SHUFFLING

Please finish this wonderful story please



Author's Response:

Hi Amy! Thanks so much for reading my story. I have every intention of writing on it again very VERY soon. I'm reworking my writing schedule after a short absence due to surgery back in May. You can certainly look forward to an update soon!

Happy Reading and HUGS,

~Nichelle

 

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 16, 2018 11:41 am Title: Chapter 21: HUSTLING AND SHUFFLING

OMG! I just caught up on the story... and you just managed to kill my usually long rambling! I'm speechless!  I really hope you will now update this soon! It's been four months, so I can about imagine the readers that were reading it at the time it was posted are really looking forward to one.

TWINS! I know it's always referred to Mel being Brian in female form. But TWINS! Holy Mother Of God! If Ima knew Brian's name, why didn't they ever contact him? How were they separated? Gave one up for adoption? Stolen as a Baby? Is that why Jack beat him, knowing he wasn't his? SO MANY QUESTIONS! Then with Brian fainting... My shock turned into giggles. Too bad Justin hadn't gone with them. Brian might need him now, to help ground him. I'm so glad Brian and Mel have made peace with each other prior to this. Lindsay is going to be so upset! Speaking of Lindsay, who is gonna get screwed over? Lindsay or Gardner? Good thing Marcie and Cynthia are around, and Jennifer, Constance and George are around the corner.

I know Ethan is suppose to enter this story, but after everything B/J have been through together, starting the business together, legally raising the nephews together,  JUST HOW? I cringe thinking of getting to that part.

Hope to see an update soon. I liked the way you formatted this story with sidebars.

Hugs, Cathy

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 15, 2018 2:13 pm Title: Chapter 13: PROGRESS Part 1

Have to give Michael the tenacity of stupidity. ( you know, those who never win and never quit, are idiots). Three weeks... poor widdle Mikey... My mother taught me, "Stupid is as Stupid Does". That should have Deb's teachings...

As far as Michael was concerned, he’d only told the truth. Sure, the truth hurt sometimes, but it was no reason to throw away a friendship more than a decade old because of a temporary fling.

He really is clueless, isn't he? "temporary fling". Yeah, I almost hope he accidentally runs into Brian somewhere public. Hopefully where Andrew is an onlooker!

Lindsay better watch her peas and queues. Mel and Brian find out what she's been up to, and needing money for... Do I dare enter a guess and have it involve the bashing, and or harrassment of Justin?  And, boy oh boy... when she finds out Schickle is Justin's uncle... she better be afraid. Her WASP nest dream is going to be closed. Maybe right along with her parents.

When Bellweather was talking to Ted, I caught the couple of comments he made... had him over a barrel with a false lawsuit...and... his job was to ruin Brian’s reputation within Ryder Advertising, Okay... FALSE LAWSUIT... HIS JOB - RUIN BRIAN'S REPUTATION. Yeah, caught all that. Who put Kip up to it? Was it Ryder, in order to get Brian out of the company? And I think I can definitely rank Bellweather up there with Craig, as to were Brian would stick his dick. Was Bellweather's 'little soiree at his house' one of his BB Parties? When will Ted remember to tell Brian about what Bellweather said?

BTW... You made me fall in love with little Bryce Whittingham...

Thanks for another amazing story.  Cathy

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 15, 2018 9:41 am Title: SIDEBAR CHAPTER ONE- Preparing for Battle

I just thought of something else. Why wasn't a judge present for Mr Peters testimony? Why was it held in a conference room? Or is this something that will eventually go before a judge in a courtroom? Little confused there. Not very familiar on court proceedings. It just seems the judge should have heard his confession.

Cathy



Author's Response:

Hey Cathy,

 

I'm just looking over some of the reviews to make sure that where I am in this story is exactly where I need to be. So I am just now running across this question. The answer is that the first phase of any Civil trial is called the Depositional phase, which consists of two parts: the written account and video confirmation, which is what's going on in this chapter and the sidebars leading up to the courtroom showdown. This is the stage where the witness being questioned is asked questions to clarify their written account of events from their point of view, which must line up with what they've written or it can/will be disputed before the final stage (before a Civil Litigation Judge), where damages are either awarded or denied. Since it is also considered another form of evidence, the judge will be able to view the videoes as such in order to make a final determination.

It's way too evident that I watch entirely TOO MUCH CourtTv, Law & Order, and murder mysteries on ID Discovery and Dateline... LOL Hope this helps!

HUGS and LOVE,

~Nichelle

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 15, 2018 9:29 am Title: SIDEBAR CHAPTER ONE- Preparing for Battle

was trying to hold off from commenting... but I  realized  I needed to interject something. Why only ONE million dollars? They clearly should have asked for more. Hobbs, SR has more than enough money. Chris isn't even gonna pay a price for his crime. If Samuel was paying Mr Peters TWO million, and lord knows how much to Russo, I feel with that much money at his disposal, they should have asked for multiple, MULTIPLE millions! Justin was going to be an artist. I know that doesn't mean he would have made it, but he already showed talent beyond his years. How much can an artist make in 10 years or more, when they start selling paintings in the 5 or 6 figure range? Also with Justin's mental state, any college would be out of the question. How is he suppose to support himself during his lifetime? Regardless of the settlement, nobody wants to sit on their hind end their whole life, wasting away with nothing to do. Well, I guess there are the WASP wives that don't work. But the dollar amount should have fit the crime. The father will pay, but Chris won't...  I hope someone with clout can make such Chris never gets a chance for college...

Well, now that I had my rant... Need I say that Lindsay is a CUNT? Michael is too. How dare they enter the loft and take it into their own hands to toss Justin out of his home! I hope Brian and Mel move to have her rights removed, and Brian's reinstated. And Michael... I don't even want to imagine what Brian's reaction will be when that article comes out in the paper. Or, the rest of the family for that matter. He won't be able to even get a job in Pittsburgh after this. He should be ostracized from the Avenue! I hope Ben sees through him in time before they move towards a relationship. Ben has seen B/J's relationship. He knows the dynamic of the two. He knows the person Justin is (was). How can he allow Michael to put such a damning perspective about Justin out there, without calling him out on it? I hope Michael complains to Ben about Brian treating him the way he is, so he has to come clean with what he and Lindsay did.  Can Michael be sued? I know he doesn't have much, but he must have his trusty comic books and toys... And why is David going to Pittsburgh? They aren't LEGALLY married are they? David shouldn't have to be responsible for Michael's screw-ups. Michael is 30 yrs old. He can make his own decision. Even if a person is married, that doesn't mean a spouse is responsible for the others actions. God rest his soul, but if my husband would have murdered somebody, would it have been my fault?

Loving the story. I don't care which way you spin a story. They are all riveting, pulling a reader in. Thank you for that.

Hugs, Cathy

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 14, 2018 11:09 pm Title: Chapter 3: SQUARE ONE

First thank you for your response to my question concerning Chapter 1.

Stockwell... I wanna bitch slap him about now. He needs a size 12 boot kicked up his ass... Where are you Emmett? Glad to know Horvath is an honest cop. I hope he slips a little word into Baxter ear about how Stockwell wanted him to handle this case. Especially after the way Stockwell talked to Hobbs, and Hobbs said, "Having a good puppet ain't half bad, Jim." I'm sure it won't change the charges already filed, but if that bit of information came up at civil court... could that be damaging evidence?

The civil suit... I always wondered why that wasn't part of the show. Melanie, for being a kick-ass gay rights lawyer, should have insisted on it. And, I don't believe Brian is stupid enough to not follow through with it either. Did you know that Pennsylvania is one of only eight states that has given its Attorney General the authority to seek a civil remedy for a violation of a citizen's civil rights? So, that being said, that was one of the errors the writer's made during the show. I also always wondered why Brian wasn't called as a witness to testify.

Anyway, onto the next chapter. I'm so enjoying this...

Hugs, Cathy

Reviewer: bjluv Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 14, 2018 7:30 pm Title: Chapter 1: HOW DID YOU GET HERE?

Okay... Just started this story. Loving it already... just like all your stories. So, if you could clear me up on something... PLEASE... I read the reviews for Chapter 1, and most of them are talking about Deb, Craig, Lindsay, Joan and Claire. Non which are mentioned in this chapter, other than Craig being an asshole.  So, What is going on? HELP!

Hugs, Cathy



Author's Response:

Hi Cathy,

 

Like you, people usually read multiple chapters at a time, and leave me reviews whenever they are able. Any generalized-left review (instead of done within the corresponding chapter) will register as being under 'Chapter 1'. Most of the reviews under this chapter are for areas much later in the story.

 

HAPPY READING and THANK YOU for taking the time to review my work! I'm glad that you are liking it so far!

 

~Nichelle

Reviewer: bksbracelet Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 27, 2018 8:16 am Title: Chapter 21: HUSTLING AND SHUFFLING

Omg what!! Now that is a real twist and one that will spin everything another way

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: May 20, 2018 8:42 pm Title: Chapter 21: HUSTLING AND SHUFFLING

WHAT? WTF as Brian would tell if he wasn't on the ground. That's so unexpected and weird. Sure they act the same way, but twins?

Gardner and Lindsay: this is so awful; they are preparing something really damaging for Brian, but Cynthia is keeping an eagle eye on the place.

Reviewer: wellreadbunny Signed [Report This]
Date: May 20, 2018 8:07 am Title: Chapter 21: HUSTLING AND SHUFFLING

Whst the hell. You can not end with that.

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