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Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Jul 30, 2017 12:56 pm Title: Chapter 14: Wednesday, November 15th

I forgot to say how much I've enjoyed the little bits of Brit thrown into this story.  Then we get a Latin lesson at the end.  Love the librarian.  It's time that Carl got more involved with the St. James problems.  I'm hoping that you solve the mystery of who robbed Brian because Mikey carping on Justin as the culprit is making me want to box him upside the head.



Author's Response:

We're chuffed that you like our unique language blend. Karynn was corrupted by living in London for three years, and now Brynn is doing her best to futher that corruption. :D

Okay, we'll confess that although we know some of the Latin phrases, we have to look some of them up to find just the right ones.

Isn't Frau Rose great? She's modeled on one of Karynn's high school teachers.

We're enjoying the developing friendship between Carl and Justin. Another excellent role model for our favorite blond.

Carl and Wen are excellent investigators, so they will solve the mystery of the burglary . . . probably. *evil authors cackling away*

*cough* We've also been known to want to box Michael upside the head.

Thans for another amazing review, Phyllis! More soon.

~ KaBrynn

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Jul 30, 2017 12:31 pm Title: Chapter 13: Tuesday, November 14th

Love Vic.  He's a breath of fresh air.  Jennifer is not so lucky.  She thinks Craig is going to stick around even if Justin is gone?  Brian is realizing that there is nobody like Justin but Justin is not going to be sitting around pining for Brian.



Author's Response:

Yay, another review for chapter 13! Thanks, Phyllis.

We both wish there had been more of Vic in the show. He was a surrogate father for all the 'lost boys', especially Brian (and, of course, Michael). Now it's Justin's turn.

You're right in your assessment of Brian and Justin. We're all waiting for Brian to wake up! Yeah, yeah, stud, we're pestering you again, lol.

~ KaBrynn

Reviewer: nkaur550 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Jul 30, 2017 5:18 am Title: Chapter 14: Wednesday, November 15th

That was Amazing..last part was superrrrrrr hot...brian is soooo missing sunshine..physically and mentally...lols.

lopsided racoon....seriously that cracked me..rofl.

Brian was feeling something like jealousy when Em gave kiss to sunshine...but stubborn ass*** ignored it too.

Cant wait for more..☺

Thank u for the update.



Author's Response:

I (Karynn) can tell from all the gifs you've posted on FB that you just... melted, Navneet. Brynn and I are wishing you a speedy recovery - espespecially Brynn, since she masterminded that scene. :D

Justin carries off that lopsided racoon look really well, don't you think? I need to search out an appropriate pic, lol.

Brian does have a proven track record of pretending he's not jealous, but we're onto him.

More soon. Thanks for reviewing!

~ KaBrynn

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Jul 30, 2017 3:31 am Title: Chapter 12: Monday, November 13th

Love how you've changed this just enough.  That Cynthia is more than willing to help Justin.  And Brian is helping David!  How strange is that, but in a good way!



Author's Response:

Thank you for appreciating the way we've tweaked canon in this fic, Phyllis!

We really like having Cyn on Justin's side; she figures she's looking out for her boss. :) Brian and David as quasi-friends does seem strange on the face of it, but it's a very smart move for both of them, lol.

More soon!

~ KaBrynn

Reviewer: Glo Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 30, 2017 1:38 am Title: Chapter 14: Wednesday, November 15th

Jesus Christ! That was sizzling hot! And it was a memory that he gets to relive over & over...oh my! When are they going to get back together? It's killing me here...



Author's Response:

Brynn capped that chapter with the perfect scene, didn't she? I (Karynn) had to fan myself while she was writing it. It does seem that Brian has quite the treasure trove of memories to call on...

Brian's still being a pill about seeing Justin's side of things, but he may very slowly be coming around. He's tired of the readers bitching at him - says he gets to queen out for awhile longer, lol.

We're working steadily on the next chapter. Stay tuned.

Thanks so much for reviewing, Glo!

~ KaBrynn

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 29, 2017 8:52 pm Title: Chapter 1: Saturday, November 4th, 2000

I don't know if it's such a rare thing, an American working with a Brit, but the result is very entertaining, that's for sure! As a French reader, I didn't notice all the nuances between American and British English, I'm too captivated by this story and its development.

Brynn should definitely write more or publish more.

As for the "... and more", I bet we all are waiting for these parts. I'll get my fan when they happen.

 



Author's Response:

You're compliments on our story have us completely chuffed, Claire.

I (Karynn) was being a bit tongue-in-cheek about Brits and Americans writing together; I think it happens quite often. The most important thing, IMO, is to mesh well with another author and to enjoy writing together.

Your English is so good that, if you hadn't mentioned it, I wouldn't have guessed you're not a native speaker of English. :) The other author I write and beta with extensively, Alois, is also French. Some of my favorite authors are French as well.

If you like mPreg (although it's really just one of the elements of the story) and haven't discovered this one yet, I highly recommend Sorchandromeda's 'The King's Will' on AO3. It's the only example of high fantasy in the QAF fandom that I've found. Here's a link in case you're interested: http://archiveofourown.org/works/7573045/chapters/17229571

Brynn has been writing for years, in a number of fandoms, and I've dabbled in a couple of her Supernatural stories. Tricky Business is her first QAF story, but we have more planned. :) Here's a link to her works on AO3: http://archiveofourown.org/works/search?utf8=%E2%9C%93&work_search%5Bquery%5D=Brynn_Jones.

I like to tease Brynn about becoming a porn writer because the scenes she writes are so interestering, fun, and erotic.

Do keep that fan handy as we work to reunite the boys. :D

~KaBrynn

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 29, 2017 7:05 pm Title: Chapter 14: Wednesday, November 15th

Don't worry about vocabulary! Happy to read that Brian is considering telling Carl about Chris. The last part is hot as hell! Brian won't be able to avoid Justin. He will have to touch him, hold him and more...

Thank you for the update!



Author's Response:

Our first review on the new chapter! Thank you, Claire. *doing a happy dance*

It's such a rare thing, an American working with a Brit, right?

That last scene is all to Brynn's credit. I (Karynn) keep telling her she should consider a career change...

Touching, holding... and more. Yum, we're all for that. :)

~ Karynn & Brynn

Reviewer: orhida43 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 11, 2017 8:17 am Title: Chapter 13: Tuesday, November 14th

I like your story very much, so I'm so sorry that there are no more updates. So much story is abandoned. I hope this will not be the case with you.

Do not forget us!    



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, Orhida! We hope you noticed that we tagged you in a comment on KD's FB page, letting readers know we'd be returning to this story as soon as possible.

Never fear; neither of us would abandon a WIP. We're currently working on the next chapter and plan to post it soon! :) Look for a teaser on FB later today.

~ KaBrynn

 

Reviewer: Tagsit Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 31, 2017 1:12 am Title: Chapter 13: Tuesday, November 14th

Just two questions: 1. why didn't Horvath tell Brian the descriptions of the thieves given by the witnesses instead of just having him go thru random mug shots? You'd think he'd be more likely to recognize the perpetrators from a description, right? 2. Why did you use 'Smythe' for the name of Babylon's owner rather than the canon 'Sapperstein'? Or are these just silly irrelevant questions? Guess I'm just curious. Lol. TAG



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing, TAG! In response (at last) to your questions:

1) Mugshots are the best bet for identifying the burglar(s), even if it's a long shot. At this point in the story, we don't know how many descriptions Detectives Horvath and Wen have gathered from witnesses; descriptions would probably be vague and contradictory, so the detectives wouldn't ask Brian if he recognizes the robbers based on those. Also, a police sketch of the burglar(s) likely wouldn't be created for an isolated robbery - unless a witness, who felt they could provide a clear description, volunteered to go to the police station to work with a police artist.

The best way to proceed for now is to find one of the stolen items and investigate from that end.

2) We diverged as of 1x10, and Saperstein isn't part of canon until the second season. The only similarity between Smythe and Sap is the first letter of their last name, lol; we hope to keep the Sap cretin out of our story entirely.

We're working on the next chapter now! :)

~ KaBrynn

Reviewer: Cemegh Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 28, 2017 10:18 pm Title: Chapter 1: Saturday, November 4th, 2000

I'm really enjoying this fic. The sex scenes are hot hot hot. I really hope Brian pulls his head out of his ass and uses his brain to come up with a solution to the Kip situation, realise that the robbery was a planned event, not opportunistic, and stop being so apathetic. Can't wait to read more.

One small criticism is the use of north england slang. I find it really jarring to hear any of the American characters suddenly sound like they're characters from "Coronation Street". Anyroad, just a thought. Perhaps you've already addressed this and I missed it. Otherwise, I think your story is mint. 😉

Kearney



Author's Response:

A response to your wonderful review at last, Kearney... We've been waiting till we could say that RL has finally allowed us to return to the story. :)

We're glad to hear you like the sex scenes. We do too. More to come (pun intended).

Change isn't easy for Brian, but we passed on your suggestions.

Our unique blend of English does draw comments. At this point, it's part of the flavor of the story, for better or worse. ;)

~ KaBrynn

Reviewer: nkaur550 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Mar 27, 2017 5:10 am Title: Chapter 13: Tuesday, November 14th

Things are getting out of hand for justin...story is getting better and better...brian missing more sunshine everyday and justin is getting over brian ...why am i feeling u r going to involve ethan now.??? Hmm.. i cant figure out how u guys mind works... Superb chapter.....thanks for sharing.



Author's Response:

We're so glad you're enjoying the way the story is developing, Navneet. We certainly appreciate your reviews! :D

We don't want to give too much away, but we will say 'expect the unexpected'. *evil authors cackling away*

~Brynn & Karynn

Reviewer: Glo Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 26, 2017 10:52 pm Title: Chapter 13: Tuesday, November 14th

I love this story & all this plot if necessary but when oh when are we going to get some Brian/Justin moments? And when will Brian get his stubborn head out of his ass and realize it wasn't Justin's fault? 



Author's Response:

We're trying to get the boys back together but haven't succeeded yet. We keep reminding ourselves that this story is 'slow burn' and that it has only been eleven days since the burglary. Maybe the boys will really get to know each other this time around? We're hoping.

Brian is making incremental progress, so don't scare him off...

We'll have to see if we can't come up with some kind of Brian and Justin moment to satisfy you, even if it's not exactly what you have in mind. Stay tuned.

~Brynn & Karynn

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 26, 2017 9:54 pm Title: Chapter 13: Tuesday, November 14th

The pressure is getting high with Chris. Which one will make the mistake that will push the other over the edge?

Now Brian knows Justin got his backpack from Carl.



Author's Response:

Chirs is such a bully - undoubtedly, in part, because he's denying his own sexuality - although that's no excuse for his behavior. We keep telling Justin to be cautious, and he seems to be listening...

Thanks for again being the first to review a chapter, Claire. :)

~Karynn & Brynn

Reviewer: Tagsit Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 20, 2017 5:16 am Title: Chapter 12: Monday, November 13th

I never understood why Justin or his mother didn't report the locker burning to the police. The whole 'I don't want to be called a tattle tale' thing is so stupid and juvenile. An adult deals with stuff like that by reporting it to the authorities. Setting fire in a school is a MAJOR deal - seriously dangerous to ALL the kids if the fire got out of control. That needs to be reported even if the police don't do anything about it. And it would have helped a lot when Hobbs was later tried for the bashing since he wouldn't have had a spotless record then, even if he wasn't convicted for the fire and was only a suspect. Grrr. (Ok, putting my lawyer persona away again. Lol). TAG



Author's Response:

We appreciate your lawyerly input, TAG, and will take it into account as the ramifications of Justin's locker being torched play out. That incident is still evolving.

Hah! We really got your dander up with this latest chapter. Now patting ourselves on the back. :D

More to come next Sunday.

~Brynn & Karynn

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 20, 2017 4:59 am Title: Chapter 12: Monday, November 13th

Things are getting out of control for Justin at school. I hope he will ask for help to Carl.

Brian with David was unexpected, but it could work for both of them.



Author's Response:

High school can be plenty helllish without what Justin is enduring. Our blond is a fighter, though - can't imagine him giving in. We'll have to see who he might turn to for assistance. He does have lots of good people backing him, particularly his surrogate parents. :)

Yay! We got you with one of our surprise twists. Glad you think Brian colluding with Dr. Dave is believable.

Thanks for reviewing, Claire. As always, we're already working on the next installment.

~Brynn & Karynn

Reviewer: nkaur550 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Mar 20, 2017 4:47 am Title: Chapter 12: Monday, November 13th

I forget to ask everytime..😄 i want to know what are they whispering to each other in the cover ... i bet something naughty/dirty...😍😜 ... dont tell me now ... u know.. u can add a little scene in the fic... maybe it can be in future or in a flash back... depends ... if u dont mind..or u if u want u can tell me now... ur choice.... i love their expressions in here..they look soo relaxed and comfy here..❤..thank u..☺



Author's Response:

Just realized you'd left another review to ask this all-important question. :D You'll have to use your imagination for now, Navneet, but we'll see what we come up with later on. A hint just for you: The banner scene hasn't happened yet...

~KaBrynn

Reviewer: nkaur550 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Mar 20, 2017 4:22 am Title: Chapter 12: Monday, November 13th

That was fantastic chapter....that teachers name suits him mr.dickson oops dixon.. what a prick... i am soo happy to see justin happy happy.. i hope those homophobes doesn't effect sunshines shine... he is soo cute... and brian is well i am surprised he is helping dr.dave ...hmm this is getting interesting.. thanks for the update.. keep it up u guys..💙❤💜

 

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for another wonderful review, Navneet! You're certainly spot on about that plonker Dixon.

Justin's a fighter; I don't think it's in him to give up. Plus, his surrogate parents are one hundred percent behind him. He couldn't ask for better people than Deb and Vic to have his back. :)

We've caught your interest with another of our twists, I see. Brian doesn't necessarily think Dr. Dave is such a bad guy this time around. We'll have to see if that changes.

As usual, we're already working on the next chapter.

~Brynn & Karynn

Reviewer: Tagsit Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Mar 13, 2017 5:53 pm Title: Chapter 11: Sunday, November 12th

Well, at least Brian's back in his loft now. Hopefully, things will get back to normal soon. TAG



Author's Response:

We do hope 'normal' includes a certain blond. :)

Thanks for reviewing, TAG.

~Karynn & Brynn

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Mar 13, 2017 3:34 am Title: Chapter 11: Sunday, November 12th

It's good that Brian is back home.  You gotta wonder how someone managed to take everything out of the loft and nobody see anything.  I hope this time they catch the crooks.  Brian needs to get his head out of his ass and get back with Sunshine.



Author's Response:

If anyone can catch the burglars, it's detectives Horvath and Wen. That female detective certainly intimidated the heck out of Brian. 

Be patient with our favorite brunet. He's starting to come around... we think. Considering it has only been nine days, including the day of the robbery, since our story started, he's making remarkable progress.

Thanks for reviewing, Phyllis!

~KaBrynn

Reviewer: Glo Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 13, 2017 2:57 am Title: Chapter 11: Sunday, November 12th

Omg those sex scenes were so hot, especially the one of Brian in the shower with the dildo...holy crap! Wicked seductive & sultry...yum yum yum. Love that their fantasizing about each other. We need these boys back together pronto! 



Author's Response:

Brynn should really become an M/M erotic fiction author, don't you think? I was melting while reading - when I wasn't laughing uproariously, that is. :D

We keep dropping unsubtle hints to Brian, but the brunet is a wee bit stubborn. But, just think of all the progress he's made in merely nine days since our story started. Then you won't mind waiting for the boys to reunite, right? *running and hiding from the rotten tomatoes*

Thanks for reviewing, Glo! We're working on chapter twelve now. :)

~Karynn & Brynn

Reviewer: nkaur550 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Mar 13, 2017 2:09 am Title: Chapter 11: Sunday, November 12th

Ok.... so the stud is back to his precious Loft... good for him... i am wondering when he will realize that something is missing other then his furniture. How is he going to replace that important part of his home and life. He can get back the materialistic things but not the most important thing or person whom he is missing so badly...but so damn stubborn to admit even to himself. Sigh.....Amazing going... keep it up guys... i love this fic....

Thank u....❤



Author's Response:

Thanks for another wonderful review, Navneet. We're made up by all your comments. :)

Brian asks that you take his childhood into consideration - his material possessions are an indicator of how far he's come, and that he's left Jack and Joan behind. We haven't given up hope that he'll figure out just what essential item is missing, given enough time. Including the day of the burglary, it has been only nine days since our story began.

We're working on chapter twelve now.

~Brynn & Karynn

Reviewer: nkaur550 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Mar 13, 2017 2:00 am Title: Chapter 10: Veterans Day, Saturday, November 11th

Brian kinney gives a shit.... u sooo care about sunshine....lols.......amazing progress.... i like it....thank u..❤



Author's Response:

Thanks for the wonderful feedback, Navneet!

Yes, Mr Kinney does give a shit, but he probably needs more time to process that knowledge. :D

~KaBrynn

Reviewer: nkaur550 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: Mar 13, 2017 1:56 am Title: Chapter 9: Friday, November 10th

Wow..... at the start in was like .....what the hell Brian and Em doing??? Gosh..... u guys know how to confuse ur readers sometimes....lol...i missed reading this chapter... i went straight to 10th chapter...this was fun chapter....i liked it.

Thank u...❤💙💜



Author's Response:

Wicked grins that we confused you... although we're sure that didn't last long, Navneet. Thanks for going back and reviewing chapters 9 and 10. We greatly appreciate it. :)

Emmett and Brian together are such a hoot - as are Emmett and Justin.

We're glad you enjoyed this chapter!

~Karynn & Brynn

Reviewer: DarkandLovely Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 12, 2017 10:56 pm Title: Chapter 11: Sunday, November 12th

That was HOT!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing, LaChelle. Brian and Justin - even when they're not together, it has to be hot, right? :D

More in a week.

~Karynn & Brynn

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Mar 12, 2017 9:53 pm Title: Chapter 11: Sunday, November 12th

It's funny how Brian and Justin have the same fantasy about the glass dildo; did they use it just before the burglary (it was in the dishwasher after all). I could imagine the faces of the cops seeing it!

Gus is adorable and always happy to see Justin.

Brian with "whatshername": what does he expect from her? Be the straight friend Michael could talk to? It will be difficult for her as she hoped to be more. Let's see if she comes. He's out of his element at the Big Q and maybe still drugged out, so this was not his best pitch.

At least he has a new bed and he won't wake up to a nasty diaper!

I hope he will see the pictures of Justin and Gus.



Author's Response:

Thank you for being the first to review the longest chapter to date, Claire. We're chuffed that you enjoyed it so much!

It does seem that both boys are enamored of Brian's favourite dildo. I wonder if Justin has a preferred toy when he's on the receiving end. It would seem the boys did use that dildo just before the burglary. We'll leave that scene to your imagination. :D

Brynn writes good cop, doesn't she? She's made up that you enjoyed that scene.

We can never have too much Gus! He and Justin have so much fun together.

We'll have to see what develops with Mikey's 'girlfriend' from the Big Q. Our out-of-his depth stud refuses to think about that any further, much less talk about it. Brian still feeling the aftereffects of that Veterans Day party more than twenty-four hours later? Impossible! Shame on you! he says. :D One teensy joint earlier the same day obviously didn't count.

You're right, at least Brian is back in his loft, although it will take quite a while for it to feel like 'home' again. Will he realize one essential element is missing? Somehow, we think Brian may get tasked with diaper duty in the future...

Brian is quite observant, even when he pretends not to be. We too are waiting to see whether he acknoledges those photos.

As usual, we're already working on the next chapter. :)

~KaBrynn

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