Date: Jul 17, 2017 6:24 pm Title: The Balcony
I’m not sure what to think about Daphne here – I understand, she only cares for Justin and is afraid he’ll get hurt, but she also knows how much Justin loves Brian, to say he’ll find a better partner – she should know that this isn’t something Justin wants to hear. At least Debbie's response is positive and supportive. I know it’s ridiculous, but every time you let Brian call this baby “Junior” you made me smile. It’s cute.
I suffer with them, it must be really hard for Brian. And the moment, he tells Justin, he’s sorry, is so tragic…
Date: Jul 17, 2017 5:22 pm Title: Team Cold Turkey
Hi again! They’re so hot together and also cute “Junior's changed his mind." – Beautiful… And Brian asking their friends to help them – again it shows that he isn’t just a selfish asshole… I love how you let them take small steps in the right direction. And although Brian is drunken once again, I think the most important thing is that he admits that he’s scared. It’s human. Warmest regards, a.
Date: Jul 17, 2017 4:59 pm Title: Gus
So, Brian is no longer in denial. A first step. But how afraid and scared he must be… He, the Stud of Liberty Ave was knocked up, everyone will know that he has bottomed. And if he considered to keep the baby, then no more drinking, drugging… what about tricking…. He will get corpulent… And what happens after birth… taking responsibility for another person… It must be very hard for Brian, a very difficult decision what to do… And although I feel sympathy for Brian, this one sentence has to hurt Justin so much: “Junior's going to be born with a taste for the high life."
By the way, I think it's very good that you decide to have a pregnant Brian (and not Justin).
Terrible what happens to Gus. But due to this accident they are approaching again, they open up, start talking about it and – maybe the most important thing – being honest to each other. And it nearly breaks my hearts when Brian admits that he’s afraid of not being able to stop drinking.
Date: Jul 17, 2017 4:02 pm Title: Failure to Thrive
A very exciting chapter! I'm so sorry for Justin. His fears for their baby and his despair are so palpable. I love the way you show their clear bond and connection (for example when Brian reacts to his voice, talks to him, chooses him to accompany him to the hospital …)
“A question darted through Justin's mind: how could he be so calm and Michael so distraught? Did Michael love Brian more than he did?” – A few words to Michael… I have to admit, I don’t like him very much. There were too many scenes in the show in which his behavior has annoyed me so much. For example this scene when he told Brian he knows about the cancer, crying; asking Brian what he should do without him – in my opinion, he’s very selfish. So, I think how you describe Michael here suits him very well.
I love the way you turn dramatic scenes also into something funny “Justin, show the Doc your dick" - :-) Great! And then it turns into something so heartbreaking and again, I feel so sad for Justin. And Brian - how to be angry with him, he still didn’t understand what happened to him at all…
Date: Jul 17, 2017 3:16 pm Title: The News
“Baby” and “He’s the father of my child” – You made me laugh. I said it before, you describe his confused feelings so well. And then, the tragedy starts… Brian is in denial. But who could blame him for this… It’s so exciting, so far… Thanks again for another great story!
Date: Jul 17, 2017 3:02 pm Title: The Test
I love their conversations about cows and frogs and other things… Yup... :-)Again, you’ve done a fantastic job – I love these telephone conversations between Justin and Brian and later between Justin and the Doc – especially when Justin talks about the broken condom and about his fears to confront Brian with the truth. You describe his confused feelings so well. Warmest regards, a.
Date: Jul 17, 2017 1:58 pm Title: The Broken Condom
Hi again! After reading “Monogamy” I was looking forward to this new story, although the description has made me a little afraid. I don’t mind mpreg (I even liked it in some stories), but I always suffer if the two hurt each other too much…
Really good start. And again, a scene in the show where they should have talked a little bit more… I love your idea that Brian would’ve followed Justin to Vermont. And what should I say… I love your writing-style, how you characterize them (and stay in character), how you let them fuck each other (it’s so hot) and also how you let them talk with each other. – “I was there all day, every fucking day, until you were out of a coma, and then I was there every fucking night. I knew your progress in therapy better than your own fucking mother, speaking of whom, she told me that if I cared about you, I'd leave and never come back. I think you're smart enough to figure out what it meant . . . what it means . . . that I complied with her wishes." – I’ve always imagined it to be a little bit more romantic, but it suits them. :-) And if Justin hasn’t known or felt so far, now, he would have to understand how much he means Brian, how much Brian cares…