Date: Jul 25, 2016 5:36 pm Title: Chapter 12
Lindsey and Mel just can't seem to learn their lessons at all can they? sheesh! to presume they can just use Gus's credit card is pretty audasious of them. Mel especially seems to think Brian and gus "owe" her. And Lindsey is going down!! Yee ha! couldn't have happened to a better bitch. LOL
JR is finally seeing the truth. Michael had no choice but to tell her the truth adn now he's paying the price of it. Once again, his selfishness is costing him huge. Ben and Brad will do wonders for JR. Seeing Ben deal with Michael was great! Again, Michael assuming that Ben should automatically "save" him is unreal!!
Really glad the Deb is finally coming around to seeing the truth of everything. Yes...it will definitely take taime for everyone to really trust her once again. She just going to have to suck it up though. Hope she prepared to do it.
cheers!!
Elaine
Date: Jul 25, 2016 3:09 pm Title: Chapter 13
I feel bad for Gus and I love Brian and Justin parenting. It will interesting when JR interacts with them.
Date: Jul 25, 2016 5:39 am Title: Chapter 13
Beautiful story with lots of emotions and fun as well.
For the next, I would choose "Justin friend with Ben" first.
Thank you for entertaining us!
Date: Jul 25, 2016 5:31 am Title: Chapter 12
Ha ha ha: I love this; Lindsay won't even get the lawyer her mother sent her because she's a liar and he learned it fast.
As for Dumb the First: his daughter hates him now and he's alone against everybody.
Maybe they will open their eyes and admit the truth, at least to themselves.
[Report This]Date: Jul 25, 2016 3:14 am Title: Chapter 13
You've ended this on a positive note. JR is happy with Ben and Brad. Lindsay has her used car dealer. Mel's back in Canada without her daughter. Even Mikey has a new guy, one that's completely gullible. All the foster children are doing well, as are Chad and Mia. Best of all Gus is in a safe place and happy.
Date: Jul 25, 2016 1:54 am Title: Chapter 13
Another fine story my friend! Thank you for sharing your wonderful work.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading my warped mind.
Date: Jul 25, 2016 1:39 am Title: Chapter 13
And now for my last review of the "Young, Old and Ridiculous:"
I LOVED that you had Gus update us on life as he sees it! Since he was the most affected by the issues presented, he seems fitting for him to have the last word. I'm so proud of him for not becoming a product of Mel and Lindsay's neglect or letting their assholery change the person he is becoming like it did to JR.
I'm glad that JR has shed her DLS persona and her 'parents.' Perhaps being with Ben and Brad will heal her in the long run and she and Gus can renew their relationship before she was turned into the mini-M&M that she was. Hopefully she'll go on to remain clean, sober and have a bright future.
I'm also glad that Delusional-No-More was not just a short-term moniker for Debbie but became an actual fact. It was past time that she stopped letting the rose-coloered glasses for her spineless and spoiled son rule her life! Even though Michael is in a new relationship (WHY STAR WHY? LOL), it is obvious that he hasn't changed or learned any life-changing lessons at all. Well I hope that his John is prepared to stay broke and invests in some top-quality earplugs. He'll need them! Meanwhile, I really hope Carl and Deb can get back to their lives but happy that they are taking it slow.
I don't blame Brian and Justin one bit for being still wary of Deb after a year. She did a lot of damage to them in the eight she was a shrew! But at least they are still willing to give her a chance, even if the relationship will never be as it once was. Perhaps after the mending, it will be stronger. I think Princess Mia will play a large role in that!
Well now it is time for the update regarding Slutty Felony and Horny Neglectful-Ass... It is a good thing that the toxic relationship has FINALLY met its end. Lindsay must be in her full glory even if the man she is now married to doesn't have as much money as Brian and Justin. She'll get to be a socialite and have dick-on-demand...or at least until the urge hits for her to carpet-munch. But then again as a sleazy used car saleman and a hetero dude, he might just be into that.
I'm not surprised that Melanie went back to Canada and no longer has anything to do with any of them. No one really knows her there or what she's capable of and now that Jenny isn't there, she is free to be who she wants to be and forget where she came from. I doubt that she is missed!
Well I am going to miss giving this running commentary of Who's Who is Asshole-ville! I am so looking forward to MORE of your work. You are an amazing writer who never fails to make me feel. Reading your work is not just a pleasure but a much-needed respite from my real life and writing adventures. And I thank you!
Happy Writing and HUGS,
~Nichelle
Author's Response:
I won't leave you for long. I just wrote a chapter for an anti-michael fic.
[Report This]Date: Jul 25, 2016 1:16 am Title: Chapter 12
Love that Ben is in a happy relationship and willing to take JR. Enjoyed JR telling Michael off. Linds should get the jail time. As for your next story, could you combine the two? They both sound so good.
Author's Response:
I am trying to combine it but i don't have Ben in the role yet. Maybe the second chapter i will get Ben, Blake and Drew to start hanging out together. Well see how it works on that one.
Thanks for reading my madness.
[Report This]Date: Jul 25, 2016 12:59 am Title: Chapter 12
I will be sad to see this end it has been such a joy to read because all the ones who got on my nerves are getting their just desserts.
Deb finally removed the repose colored glasses to see the truth about Lindsay, Melanie and Mama's precious little baby boy Mikey, he took that money she begged Drew for to buy a toy, he couldn't be bothered to go to work to support himself or his daughter but he could steal money for a toy? SMH
Lindsay using the credit card for her own selfish reasons is not surprising anymore, Mel joining in on the phone is icing on the cake, I agree with David it would have been nice to see the look on their faces as the movers put their stuff on the lawn for all the neighbors to see.
Michael lying to JR about Ben not wanting to see her was so him and so pathetic that the girls joined in, especially since Michael never once helped them with JR's support, but pettiness loves company so they all should get a place together lol.
Lindsay and Melanie go at each was funny because they are two spoiled children just looking for attention, of course this attention they might not enjoy so much but you reap what you sow. (Mommy and daddy Peterson not helping is Hilarious!!)
That was nice of Ben and his husband Brad to take JR in this kid needs discipline and a strong family structure to save her life.
I really liked that Brian and Justin put Debbie in her place she has years of groveling to do before forgiveness can be established, I agree with Justin I don't trust her either she needs to start thinking before she speaks.
I like both story ideas they both sound very interesting though the one about Brian running every time Michael calls has potential for a lot of angst :)
Author's Response:
Thank you for all the cheering on. I wrote to see if I could and you guys cheered me on. I am already on the next one. Michael is going to be thwarted at every turn and I want to return to a more humorous one.
[Report This]Date: Jul 25, 2016 12:52 am Title: Chapter 11
I'm happy that Mel, Lindsay and Mikey are getting what they deserve. From what I can see giving Deb a second chance might be worth it. Lindsay made a big mistake when she tried to push everything off on Mel. I feel sorry for Ben, I just hope that JR treats him with the respect he deserves. Mikey still doesn't get it.
Date: Jul 25, 2016 12:37 am Title: Chapter 11
So Delusional-No-More (for now at least) is following through on evicting Dumbass... Why do I feel that she will fall into old habits once she finds out that he lost his store and all the contents in it? Which is exactly what I'm waiting to see happen. Perhaps without his toys he might actually grow up...faulty theory but worth a try right?
Speaking of Dumbass Denial Stupid, it's going to be interesting to see what happens when he really understands just what he lost. Ben has moved on and by the sounds of it has a terrific husband who puts his needs FIRST. I imagine that being the VP of Operations for Liberty Air, Brad doesn't make chump change. A much better fit for an intelligent professor than a man-child who never grew up. I would think actually being able to hold an adult conversation and one that doesn't revolve around comic books would be refreshing to Ben. I'm looking forward to seeing how DDS and Desperate Lying Stupid are going to react to this change!
Speaking of changes.... can I just tell you that I had the fist pump and loud cheering going on full-blast reading about the downfalls of Slutty Felony Guilt-inducing Stupid and Horny Neglectful-Ass Accusation-throwing Stupid!! Yeah, I just had to add to their names once again! Lindsay telling Gus that he had to tell his father that he allowed her to use the card was laughable. I absolutely LOVED his response to her, telling Lindsay that he was going to do exactly what she had done for him when Mel was throwing him out. Now THAT response was befitting of Brian Kinney's son!
As far as Mel's comment that if Lindsay wasn't letting every cock near her snatch then she would have had time to pay attention to the kids...WOW Pot trying to tell off Kettle? Really? I have so many issues with Mel's self-righteousness and blame-shifting that I can't even list them all. However, I would love it if someone would point out that JR's latest stint in lock-up was because she was laid out for Layla. Whether Lindsay was there or not, JR came out of HER snatch and she should have been more vigiliant with HER daughter!
Thank you for allowing me to give my play-by-play "Young, Old and Ridiculous" reviews on this story!! This one will keep my tongue wagging and fingers typing for years to come!!
Happy Writing and HUGS,
~Nichelle
Attn Claire: LOL!! I can't help it! I'm just calling the crazy as I see it!! HUGS!
Author's Response:
I think I write just to read your opinion. I love that people got so involved in all these stories. This one is going to end in the next chapter because I feel it would lose to much if I didn't. I do have another one I've been playing with. Its Anti-Michael but not to the extremes that I have gone to in the others. I hope to have enough done to post tomorrow.
Date: Jul 25, 2016 12:17 am Title: Chapter 11
I know a ladies who coordinates her clothes with her sphynx kitties! They are super loving kitties who often bond to one person... Gus and Vinnie will be great for one another. Good for Debbie, she needs counseling as much as the rest of them. The write excellent bad guys! Do you have an approximate chapter count for this story?
Author's Response:
It's thirteen for this story. I want to write so the story doesn't become to boring.
Date: Jul 24, 2016 11:46 pm Title: Chapter 11
Everyone is getting exactly what they deserve.
Date: Jul 24, 2016 11:31 pm Title: Chapter 10
YAY!!!!! Let's see Slutty Felony Stupid try to talk her way out of this one. I doubt that Horny Neglectful-Ass Stupid or Desperate Lying Stupid will be happy or grateful for Carl, Ted and Blake's assistance in keeping JR from having to immediately return to Canada to await trial....SMH And Gus owes Melanie for living there??? Really?? She really has no clue that without Gus she wouldn't have had a house to live in. I bet she has learned that lesson now...or maybe not?
As for Dumbass Denial Stupid...He lived up to and even supassed my expectation for his callousness. If I was Debbie, I would have taken a skillet and popped the bastard upside his head or at the very least called the cops to have him arrested for Grand larceny!
Speaking of Delusional Blindness Personified... Is it time to change her name to Delusion-No-More? Brian told her exactly what would happen if Michael got his hand on money and sadly for her, she was proven right! I'm glad that Brian is feeding her with a long-handled spoon and not going into accepting Debbie blindly. I'm also glad that Justin was able to have his say. Debbie has a long way to go in mending the bridges she's burned, if she ever can. Even Carl doesn't want to have anything to do with her sniveling, whiny, still-bound-by-the-umbilical cord- offspring. Shouldn't that tell her something? As far as her telling Michael to find someplace to live and actually sticking to it...Well we shall see what we shall see about that!
Another running commentary is forthcoming for the "Young, Old and Ridiculous" <in my Robin Leech voice> Looking forward to more of the life and trials of the Asinine Adults (Melanie, Lindsay and Debbie) and the Wonder Twits (Michael and JR)!
~Nichelle
Author's Response:
I am to please the goddess of Ansty stories. This one is almost over. I am writing something new. I don't know for sure what but you'll probably see it tomorrow.
Date: Jul 24, 2016 11:26 pm Title: Chapter 11
So happy to see a new chapter!! As excellent as the previous.
JR should be relieved that Ted, Blake and Ben took and will take care of her.
The munchers continue to destroy themselves as Dumb the First.
I loved:
Pop started muttering that hopefully Armani doesn’t make cat suits
I looked at Pop and said we should buy matching sweaters at the Big Q for the animals. He told me Big Q is Dad’s punishment for allowing Deb in the house.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading me and commenting it helps me change a direction if I need to.
[Report This]Date: Jul 24, 2016 10:40 pm Title: Chapter 10
Gotta love this. At least Deb is with the here and now and Mia likes her. Mikey is a dweb. JR has problems and Linds is about to be arested as well. Blake is a sweetheart to help JR. Can't wait to see your next chapter!
Date: Jul 24, 2016 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 10
JR is an evil pest and I hope she will realize that very soon.
Finally, Debbie saw the light: it was more than time. But as Justin said, she might say things without thinking. She has no filter or it's out of order.
As for "Dumbass Denial Stupid" to paraphrase Nichelle, he fell right into his old habits.
I can't wait to read how the mighty WASP and the bull lawyer will deal with the felony.
So much fun to come!!
Attn Nichelle: you crack me up with your comments on each chapter; it's almost a story within the story; it's a delight for my eyes or like a chocolate cake after a good meal.
[Report This]Date: Jul 24, 2016 11:35 am Title: Chapter 9
Gus told Deb what happened, he showed her the bruises. Will she believe him or stay in denial? I'm glad she wasn't hateful to Chad, he just told her like it is. He's awefully smart.
Date: Jul 24, 2016 10:30 am Title: Chapter 9
I can't believe even with all the evidence to the contrary, those dumb asses are still trying to blame Gus. The kids have been interviewed, tested and JR was dirty and all state that Gus was nowhere around. Then little miss addict goes and gets herself arrested because the merry munchers couldn't see fit to tend to their daughter for one night....but Brian's the bad parent right? You don't see him leaving his children home alone to go party and get laid.
I just love Chad for telling Deb like it is. The truth about her son coming from a child should make her feel ashamed of herself. Emmett and Drew rocked her boat a little too...and it was a smart move for Brian to show her the bruises, hopefully Deb opens her eyes. Both of the girls need to be arrested for child neglect and Lindsay for theft. Maybe Brian will catch on to the card use and stop the charges and report it. It would serve her right.
Date: Jul 24, 2016 7:44 am Title: Chapter 9
Maybe the truth will get thru Deb's thick head and maybe she will act according to it.
The kids and Drew/Emmett are a great support for Brian and Gus.
I love this story!
Date: Jul 24, 2016 7:20 am Title: Chapter 8
The munchers are as irresponsible as ever and JR is paying a lot for that.
Brian is going to break one more rule: getting a cat to cheer his son; OK, it will be a hairless cat but that's something.
I love "he wanted to check if my ass got any bigger from all the junk food". Brian does romance...
Date: Jul 24, 2016 6:13 am Title: Chapter 9
I hope Lindsay is held responsible and sent to jail for credit card theft andfraud. The nerve of that hussy!!!! Now we can officially change Lindsay's name from Slutty Stupid to Felony Stupid! Or Better yet, let's keep both names and add to them as we go along, shall we?
Michael as always is blind to his perfect child even when hearing what the officer on the phone said. Once again, Michael is PERFECT in his role as Dumbass Stupid but we'll add to his name as well making him Dumbass Denial Stupid. BTW... Is he really considering suing Mel and Lindz for custody of Desperate Lying Stupid (Yeah I added to JR's moniker too- it FITS)? Him who has NO job and not even his own house? What judge in their right minds would give DDS care of another human being? First he would need a lawyer but since he doesn't have ANY money, I doubt they would accept his ass for payment. Just saying! I think if he tries we should add 'Idiot' to his already long but accuate name.
Now its time for my assessment of Melanie aka Horny Stupid. We'll there isn't much I can say about her since she is pretty predictable in her arrogance and her tendency to withhold information. So just as her Stupid Family counterparts, she gets another description added to her name (which of course is subject to be added to again later). Her new name is Horny Neglectful-Ass Stupid.
Then we have the mother of all the Stupids, Delusional. How Debbie thinks that number 1: people owe it to her to fund and take care of her grown-ass BABY is beyond me. And then as usual, she talks down to and threatens all the while holding her hand out. I'm glad that Brian showed her the bruises even if all she'll do is deny that it ever happened since JR is involved. It could go either way but we still have to add to her name... Delusional Blind-personified Stupid. Will she still wear them when she goes north is anyone's guess but I doubt that she will see that all is NOT as she's been told by the Cunts of Canada. That is if she goes at all. I wouldn't put it passed her to send that shiftless, workless, worthless bum of a son she has in her stead even though Brian told her what the idiot will do if you put money in his hand. SMH
I really wished that Brian had turned Justin loose right then!!!!
That's all for now of my running commentary on the "Young, Old and Ridiculous." Tune in next time for another in depth look at the foolery! LOL Looking forward to MORE!
~Nichelle
[Report This]Date: Jul 24, 2016 5:33 am Title: Chapter 9
Deb is so lucky because if it was me I wouldn't even give her fifty cent to get to Canada she hears what she wants to hear and believes what she wants to believe. Up get so sick and tired of her playing that same ' You Owe Me, Us' record she needs a good smack upside the head.
Mel and Lindsay are so obtuse that they are still looking for a way to blame Gus despite the fact that evidence proves Gus wasn't even there at the party.
I wonder if Lindsay will get into trouble about using that credit card that was meant for Gus?
The next few hours are going to be quite a whirlwind for these people once Deb and Michael get to Canada, can't wait to see read the fallout :)
[Report This]Date: Jul 24, 2016 3:02 am Title: Chapter 8
One dog I could understand, but two! Brian will do anything for his kids, even getting a hairless cat, which is more then we can say for the girls and Michael. If Michael had a job, he would have money to buy his ticket to help his daughter. Lindsay trying to seduce David is soooo laughable. The police should give JR a lie detector test, then maybe, just maybe Mel would see the truth. Gus is much better off with his dads.
[Report This]Date: Jul 24, 2016 1:47 am Title: Chapter 8
Lindsay is so pathetic She put on her sexy outfit to try to seduce David and he turned her down so fast I bet her head is still spinning.
Mel left her daughter alone so she could Ho get her needs met and now JR is in even more trouble than she was before (And this is after being out of jail less than 24 Hours), I doubt she will get bail this time and even if she could get bail Mel and Lindsay don't have the money to pay for it.
Michael trying to guilt trip Brian was so pathetic typical him though, not surprised Deb got into trouble at work and is now on suspension for a week I doubt her going down there to plead her case will help it could make it worse.
They are all going to flip when they find out she has been re-arrested and this time it is for dealing, Trace is going to rat her out to save himself, she admitted that she has done this before(?), the kid wasn't nervous at all to be handing out drugs to some stranger on the street.
Mel and Lindsay haven't even started packing yet they have a few short hours before the police and David come to toss them out in the street.
Michael, Deb, Lindsay will be calling Brian non-stop for money now, I wonder how Mel and Lindsay's employers will react when they find out about this?
I hope the kids get their pets it is going to be quite a full house lol.
Can't wait to read what happens next this is a spellbinding story. :)