Date: Jan 28, 2020 1:56 pm Title: Prologue
I don't reread stories, but this is the exception. The use of shifting perspective and 2nd person POV are categorically my favourite techniques. The whole story has an Extremely Loud and Incredibly Close vibe and I love it. You wrote in canon but the characters had time apart to grow which made it more realistic. I also like that you didn't write anti anyone. Interesting study into the complexities of human beings. I love this, and feel so connected to the characters. I want more but will settle to reread it! Thanks for your dedication in writing this. x
Date: Oct 02, 2017 7:00 pm Title: Chapter 46-ESTABLISHMENT
Hot, funny, sad, business oriented... Another great chapter!
The part regarding Babylon's business and constraints is amazing: so much to check and to secure.
Amelia is adorable and funny, with her mimicking of Brian.
Date: Sep 27, 2017 6:28 pm Title: Chapter 45-REMAINS
Amelia and Brian: what a great pair! I loved the M&M's game they had and the nap she took on his shoulder.
Craig congratulating Justin is quite unsettling: far too late and kind of profiteer; maybe does he hope he could get a free painting?
Date: Sep 20, 2017 7:07 pm Title: Chapter 44-TRANSIENT
Once again, a great chapter!
I loved Harper's speech with Amelia's interventions.
Daniel and Gabe? That should be fun to see what they could become.
The idea to mix Alan's ashes with paint is genius! If the project helps Justin to paint again, that's even better.
Date: Sep 11, 2017 3:11 pm Title: Chapter 42-SURROGATES
Difficult hours for Brian and Justin, but they seem to have come to an understanding.
Difficult background of Alan, while he was young and the months before his death: what a life he had. The only lights he had were his sister and his niece, as well as Justin and Daniel.
Date: Sep 06, 2017 6:18 pm Title: Chapter 41-UNEARTHED
This chapter is so dense on emotions.
The way this story is built is amazing. Brian's dream is once again really weird, but it has a purpose, I guess.
The way you wrote the relationship between Danny and Daniel is beautiful, with great ideas.
Sam's way of preparing Amelia's breakfast is very entertaining.
Brian and Justin are still following the rough path to the recovery.
Date: Sep 01, 2017 6:25 pm Title: Chapter 40-NOVACAINE
Amazing chapter! So many great things; it's difficult to list them all.
I loved when Justin was trying to explain Gus' behavior to Brian.
Amelia also had quite funny moments.
The main part being "the talk"! Finally! And Brian listened with respect, no smirk or innuendo. Huge step for them.
Date: Aug 26, 2017 11:15 am Title: Chapter 34-LATITUDE
I don't understand clearly what's going on between Justin and Brian; why does Justin want Brian to go back to Pittsburgh?
The story of Sam and Harper is endearing: the labels are a great idea to tell without talking.
The part with Daniel revealing Justin's background is funny because of the priest presence.
Date: Aug 25, 2017 4:46 pm Title: Chapter 33-CONVERGENCE
So, Cody's dead and Chris' wife has a new love interest. The cleaning is still going on.
The AfterDeath is starting to get crowded.
The dream at the beginning is so weird.
Amelia is so amazed by Brian, it's quite funny.
Date: Aug 24, 2017 6:35 pm Title: Chapter 31-SOULS
Amazing ideas: Al, Leo, Chris, Jack, ... All of them dealing with unfinished topics, while watching the living actors of their past life.
Amazing pictures as well.
Do the tunnels exist as you describe them?
Date: Aug 24, 2017 5:31 pm Title: Chapter 30-STEWARDS
It's great to have some back story from Zeek.
I loved these lines from Justin and Brian:
“You need to have your head examined,” you told him a little while later as the two of you were entering the bank.
“You might be right,” Brian responded. “But I’m not taking my pants off right now.”
Date: Aug 22, 2017 8:16 pm Title: Chapter 28-PROVENANCE
Poor Alan: he lost his mother in a horrible way, his father ignored him and the society rejected him. He only had his sister, Stich, Zeek and Justin, part time and his death wasn't peaceful; until the end he must have felt not wanted.