Date: Nov 30, 2021 8:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
I was looking for new stories to read and found this, throughly enjoyed reading it. I like stories with Gus.
Date: Nov 30, 2021 8:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
I was looking for new stories to read and found this, throughly enjoyed reading it. I like stories with Gus.
Date: Nov 30, 2021 8:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
I was looking for new stories to read and found this, throughly enjoyed reading it. I like stories with Gus.
Date: Apr 24, 2017 4:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
So far I like it (not that I doubted it for a second, cmon, i like all your stuff!)... I'm a fan of the Mikey bashing, but I guess I can handle not bashing him too lol
I'm glad the kids have Justin, but I feel bad that Mel makes a point of saying Brian can't make decisions for his own son.
Date: Jul 19, 2016 8:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very interesting beginning. Can't wait to read more.
[Report This]Date: Jul 12, 2016 2:25 am Title: Chapter 1
You are probably right. lol.
Date: Jul 10, 2016 8:27 am Title: Chapter 1
Sorry, my mistake; Florida implied Miami in my head, which is more than restrictive.
I guess the whole state is a nice place to live.
Have a nice sunny day.
Date: Jul 10, 2016 7:29 am Title: Chapter 1
Believe me (kind of a continuation of my earlier comment) I don't think you are being harsh. I actually think you are spot on in how you describe Michael's head-space.
Author's Response:
I think that Michael was always a character that you had to hit with a brick then he came out of it. I guess harsh is bad more like i am putting alot of emotion on him. He wants to be everything to JR but when everything he is doing is going wrong he can't just say okay Justin help me. Ben hasn't said to him let me help he is constantly lecturing. Brian who would usually help can't because he need to be there for Gus. Michael is in a spin right now. Justin tries to tell everyone to let him be and he will come around. I alway think of the scene when Captain Astro dies Justin is rubbing his back and feels bad for him.
It doesn't help that Mel and Lindsay had a child with him but they never really were great friends with him. Mel wanted a baby, but really didn't want the father. Lindsay was just along for the ride. I think that no one in the story see that Michael wasn't told things when they happened like you move with my kid and tell me months later. That is wrong and the Dr they are seeing tells them.
Thank you for reading and it's been a neat experience to have people really get in to it with me.
Date: Jul 10, 2016 6:05 am Title: Chapter 1
First off - full disclosure: I really, really don't like Michael... LOL
Now, I was looking through some of the other comments and I just have to (ohgodIcan'tbelieveI'msayingthis) defend Michael a little bit. Yes, he's acting like a baby/being selfish/totally self-absorbed - because that's who he is, but he's also acting like someone who really has no idea how to parent. He wants to be the love of his child's life and he isn't and it hurts and that gets confused with old jealousies. I'm with Justin - give him time (and maybe some of those parenting classes the women are taking).
He really has NO experience with girls, raising them or dealing with them, and girls are very different than boys.
I don't like how Michael has run off, obviously, but somehow I think the girls will put him in his place a bit more. I hope so.
Author's Response:
I know I'm being really harsh. Justin is actually on Michaels side. Michael is just mad. He wants to be a good dad, but it's hard for him to talk to Justin. When he gets back home Justin is going to take him in hand and help him. Justin lets it slide but is waiting for Michael to come to him.
Date: Jul 09, 2016 6:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love this story.
Lorie
Author's Response:
Thank you to you too.
[Report This]Date: Jul 09, 2016 3:27 am Title: Chapter 1
This makes so much sense, and perhaps should have been addressed in the show. Good first chapter, I'm really enjoying it.
Author's Response:
It makes it easier to find something to write about for me. Thanks for reading and enjoy.
Date: Jul 08, 2016 3:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
I can't wait to read more of this story.
I like how you give everyone's POV and that you put Justin in this important role in the kids' lives.
He is almost still a "kid" himself for some things but very mature for some other.
So, he is the best link between the kids and the "family".
It's cute that Jenny is "in love" with him. It might be a problem with Michael as he is always jealous of Justin and maybe with Mel as well.
Author's Response:
i am actually having a hard time not writing when i start. so enjoy it.
[Report This]Date: Jul 07, 2016 6:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
So excited for a new story from you! This is bound to get interesting. Hopefully Mel will get her act together and FINALLY realize that Brian is NOT the enemy; it's the one she's sleeping with. But I digress... Great beginning and looking forward to MORE!
Happy Writing and HUGS,
~Nichelle
Author's Response:
I was thinking about Mel and Lindsay, I think that the way the show just wrote "Oh bomb we need to let go and be together then move." didn't make a lot of sense. Problems don't disappear overnight. They are both good at avoiding the elephant in the room. I want to see Brian growing and learning. I have always believed that if the show was about them growing that Brian wouldn't have pushed Justin off a cliff when he went to NY. Mel and Brian never worked out anything where Gus was concerned. I think that Mel never thought who would Gus go to if something happened.
Date: Jul 07, 2016 3:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Another story!! YAY! And so quickly too after the last one.
I know I'm going to like this one. Off to a great start.
I'm also one who felt that the gorls and kids going off to Canada was unrealistic. Much more so than Justin going off to NY. At least he was fairly nearly and was in the same country. the sudden decision for the girls et al to leave was poorly done. There's no way they'd get a working visa and everything else needed to live in Canada so quickly. You are right in that they wouldn't be able to get decent jobs, most likely stuff under the table if at all. No health insurance etc. No wonder they were under so much stress. At least you had them going to Florida.
I love that you are doing a story focusing on Gus and JR. I am so looking forward to seeing how you bring this all about. Including Micheal's involvement. (feel free to be mean to him...I don't mind at all. LOL) I think the girls need serious help adn counselling. Perhaps they'd be better off going back to the Pitts.
Mel needs to grow up. Her personal feelings towards Brian are going to really effect the kids in the long run if she doesn't smarten up. And Linds I hope, doesn't pit Mel adn Brian against each other. You've made Brian very mature in this, so I don't see him falling for any of Lindssey's macinations if she tries anything dumb.
gus and JR are going to have a great summer with their fathers. I can see Micheal really fighting for JR, especially since sh stated that she wants to live with her dads. I think gus too would prefer it. We'll have to see what happens next.
Can't wait for the next installment!!!
cheers,
Elaine
Author's Response:
I am glad that it works for you. I wasn't sure because, I like anti-michael but I decided to try and see if I could give him less crazy. I don't think I'll make it. JR is going to drive him crazy. Thank you for enjoying this.
Date: Jul 07, 2016 12:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm liked it a lot so far. You really are a prolific writer, where do you get the time and energy? Can't wait for more... ~ Kathleen
Author's Response:
I'm on vacation and I love to read. When I read everything twice including your stories, I got bored and the result was the first story. When I got done, I need something to do. Thanks for the review and your stories.
Date: Jul 07, 2016 11:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Nice first chapter -- Justin and Gus should be interesting to follow with the dynamic you established.
Feel free to be hard on the girls and Mikey (I loved WDILY) it never gets old to me.
thanks for writing!!
Author's Response:
Michael is going to have a hard time dealing with his spawn. She is alot like him.
[Report This]Date: Jul 07, 2016 3:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Not surprising that Mel and Lindsay are at each other's throats they have something of a toxic relationship. I sometimes wonder do they love each or being right more? And whatever they are fighting about is just a smoke screen so they don't have to deal with the giant elephant in the room. I like that it is being told through Gus's point of view it shows what a child sees when parents are too blinded by their anger.
Author's Response:
When the show ended it was unrealistic to me that everything was fine. I planned this with us them having to go to counseling.
[Report This]Date: Jul 07, 2016 1:49 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh boy, another story from you! You were right I did wonder why Gus was calling his parents by their name. If you want to do more then singe I'm all for it. It's easier to write Mikey, Lindz and Mel with malice. lol. Love seeing this through Gus' perception.
Author's Response:
I might not anti them like the last story but they aren't getting off easy either.
Date: Jul 07, 2016 1:27 am Title: Chapter 1
That last line was a low blow....Mel needs to check herself.
Author's Response:
I never see Mel as trusting Brian with Gus. Thanks for the review.