[Report This]Date: Jan 06, 2021 3:04 am Title: Chapter 2
Great story. Fantastic writing.
Author's Response:
Marilynne,
Thanks. I will be adding one more chapter because I realized that Karma needs to served.
~Lorie
[Report This]Date: Jan 05, 2021 10:45 am Title: Chapter 2
Aah, this was so good! I love me some stories that 1) expose Michael and Lindsay for who they are. 2) Michael's hateful comment comes to light to the family. I'm just sad Ben, Hunter, and Mel had already left and didn't get in on that revelation.
Was there enough there to get Michael's rights taken away?
But unfortunately, we never got to have Ethan getting a smackdown for the part he played in this. SEQUEL???
Todd is a good friend. I like Todd, and I always like him makng a special appearance in stories.
But on a side note, I do wonder why you put commas at the end of some of your direct speech sentences, when there's no - 'he said' to fnish it off. It kind of throws off the reading. And maybe that's a personal thing after having taken two writing classes.
But I did love the story, and would love to see it explored further.
Hugs, Cathy
Cathy, I realized that I need to do one more chapter to get it all wrapped up. Everyone will get what they deserve, some will be good and some will be bad. As for the grammer mess ups, sometimes I don't catch all of them when I do the final edit because there are times I change some things and forget to change others. When I go back and read the story again after it's posted I try to get everything I missed. Believe me, I hate when I miss the simple things the first time. ~Lorie
Author's Response:
[Report This]Date: Jan 04, 2021 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 2
Loved the way this went. Lindsay was a bitch and Michael actually thought to blame Justin when there was evidence that proved who had blabbed. Glad that Deb apologized and that Emmett got to punch whiney boy.
Author's Response:
Phyllis,
Deb realized that the son she gave birth to turned into someone she doesen't even want to know. Emmett is very protective of people he cares about, and the weasel has had it coming for a long time. Justin didn't deserve to be bashed and he certainly didn't deserve what the weasel said about him.
~Lorie
Date: Jan 04, 2021 12:30 am Title: Chapter 2
I just love a "Michael and Lindsay get what's coming to them" story, they are my favorites. From the first moment on the show when we heard "Briiiiiiaaaan" I knew I was really going to hate that man. Thank you so much for sharing your words with us.
Author's Response:
Becky,
The last chapter will give those two what they really deserve.
~Lorie
Date: Jan 03, 2021 10:42 am Title: Chapter 2
Thank god Michael and Lindsey got what they deserved.....
loved it thanks for sharing
Author's Response:
Sharon,
The final chapter will prove that Karma really is a bitch.
~Lorie
[Report This]Date: Jan 03, 2021 9:26 am Title: Chapter 2
Reading the first chapter I wondered how Lindsay could keep such a secret to herself. Well she can't and runs to her partner in crime and their common goal of separating Brian and Justin to take a place they will never have.
I appreciated that in his jealousy and pettiness Michael repeated the horrible words he said in 301 and that everyone turned their backs on him. Beautiful story Lorie. Thank you.
Author's Response:
Marie-France
Those two will find out that there are severe consequences for the things they have done.
~Lorie
[Report This]Date: Jan 03, 2021 6:45 am Title: Chapter 2
I really enjoyed this. The twit twins should know their schemes wont work.
Author's Response:
Cathy,
They will find this out the hard way.
~Lorie