Reviewer: BritinManor Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 10, 2019 11:22 am Title: Chapter 37: SORRY, NOT SORRY

Boy, you are one crazy... hmm... lady!

This was, again, an awesome chapter. So much happening! Annette should have whipped out her phone and caught the looks of Lindsay and Michael while watching Hobbs walk in. And they are willing to plea bargain with Hobbs? That should kind of seal Lindsay's fate, as she was the one who orchestrated everything with him, slept with him., and paid him. I hope he sings like a canary!

It's too bad Clarence didn't have Lindsay go over with him and congratulate her protege on his accomplishments. But she seems to think that in bed tonight she will lay the law down to her fiance. Yeah, good luck with that Lindsay. I think he'd just assume to take Ursula to bed. (What's with all these Disney references... oh, that's right... GUS!)

Hmm... however will Lindsay get home? I presume she has no money...

I loved the sizzling heat of Mel and Leda. The waving was classic you!

HUGS  ~Cathy

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 10, 2019 7:06 am Title: Chapter 35: ALL ABOUT US

The Unmentionables. Ethan should really be informed about his etch-a-sketch pencil line reference. Oh well, Prince Wannabe should have had no problem walking afterward. Criminy... the stuff you come up with is legend. I loved the Gollum and Maleficent references too. Perfect.

Be it may that you referred to Brian as incorrigible, I always think of Mikey with an incorrigible behavior/child. I do think Smartass fits Brian pretty good. But with good reason.

The Garden of Eden... maybe they should take a trip to the Fairy Capo. LOTS of Nakedness there. Let it ALL hang out!!!

All that said, from the moment Tory walked into Justin's office to the end of the chapter, I was thoroughly entertained. Quite a few chuckles happened to escape. And at 3 a.m., lord, but I was trying to be quiet! I don't know how you manage to do that time and time again!

“Crystal, Mr. Taylor,” he hoarsely whispers. 😂

HUGS ~Cathy

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 09, 2019 5:38 pm Title: Chapter 33: CLOSER Part 1

Yay for Vic! But I do have to wonder how Debbie could put the house up for his bail, even if she wanted to. Doesn't she owe a large mortgage for money she borrowed to give Michael? And as I commented once before, she WILL lose Carl over this. He is NOT going to throw his badge and career away for someone like Debbie. But, I have to wonder if Debbie knows EVERYTHING Michael has done. Not only the stolen money. Does she know about Ethan, Hobbs, and the babies? If not, she's once again gone off half-cocked and will lose everyone. Open mouth, insert foot syndrome.

The fact that Brian and Brandon could possibly be brothers is very interesting, especially when you threw in there about Jack having a twin brother. I have only read a couple of stories with them being brothers, but never from the identical twin father arc. The main reason this is interesting is that my 17 yr old granddaughter just studied this last May in AP Bio. She talked very animatedly during dinner that evening while relaying things about 'markers'. Besides the fact of how expensive this testing cost. (in all honesty... she kind of lost me.)

I find it interesting that the four of them talk so openly in a cafe. Lots of available ears there. But I do like Claire and Lynette together. Cute and fun bosom buddies.

HUGS ~Cathy

Reviewer: purpledee Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 08, 2019 5:41 pm Title: PROLOGUE... AT THE END...

Nichelle, I am so sorry that you feel criticised and that I have upset and annoyed you.  Please accept my sincere apologies and I do love and appreciate your writing.  I promise I will keep further comments on story content to myself.  I agree with you I will stop reading this story and concentrat on your others.

Thanks and sos again,

Deb L

Reviewer: purpledee Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 08, 2019 11:44 am Title: PROLOGUE... AT THE END...

Thanks for the explanation of some of my niggles with this story.

I know it would be easy to just go with the flow and enjoy the story but I'm not built like that.  I have always really got deeply into a story and noticed inconsistences within them that really bug me and to some extent, stop me enjoying the story as fully as I could.  I am the same with books, TV and film, and online stories!

I have noticed some timeline probs with many fanfiction stories that are long, multichaptered and written over time.  I understand that this will always be the case as these are not edited by publishers as a whole entity at the end as books are, for example.  As I don't write them I can only try to imagine how difficult this is!

I'm sorry as I do love all your writing and don't want to appear critical and will just try to ignore my brain. However, it still states in this story that Chris was given money that Michael had embezzled from Justin's rage monies and rage was still after the bashing, as this story also has Justin explaining how difficult it was to create Rage with his hand problems after the bashing. And it still niggles me. That's all I'm going to state about that so we'll leave it there. 

This is all really moot as, I much prefer JTTOU and SOWK anyway!

Thanks for listening,

Hugs & x

Deb L

 

Author's Response:

Thanks for commenting. I really do appreciate the feedback. But that said, I'm going to suggest from now on that you don't read this story if it bothers you for two reasons:

The first is that this story provided a vehicle for SOWK and JT2U to even be written in the first place. The writers of QAF had inconsistent timelines all the way through the series, and there were a lot of storylines left feeling incomplete. So unlike some authors, I choose to move the timelines in each of my work that's semi-canon based so that it makes sense to not only me, but the readers. If that's not your cup of tea, then okay. But don't knock them for doing what they feel is correct to do for THEIR story.

The way your mind works is not how theirs spins a story. Please remember and respect that.

Secondly, a less confident author would have found your comments thus far less encouraging, especially in terms of THEIR vision for their work. Nothing in this literary world- fanfic or not- says that you have to keep reading a story that you don't like, agree with, can lose yourself in and ultimately enjoy. Fortunately, it isn't like school where there are homework assignments on boring subjects that you have no interests in, but must be pushed through to move onto a higher grade. I write the way I want to, and if the readers enjoy it, that's all to the good. But to be constantly criticized and 'advised' based on your own preference is not only inappropriate, it's downright hurtful in a lot of ways- or at least it would be to anyone but myself.

Throughout my career as a whole, I've had to develop what is called VERY thick skin. I've learned to take the con-crit nuggets from any work I do, and apply or disregard it accordingly. That isn't the case for most of the people who write on these sites. So whereas this particular comment doesn't bother me personally, the one you left on SLA really did. I didn't respond on that work simply because I needed to formulate a response that wouldn't seem as if I didn't appreciate the rest of the comment, even if that last parting shot rankled.

So here it is in reference to ALL my work, and that of others anywhere. You cannot tell a person when to start a story (be it old or new), what to write, or when to write or not to. As a reader, I enjoy all the new work simply because the fandom won't stagnate and die out. However, anyone who knows me- both as an Administrator and as an Author- also knows that I FIRMLY believe in an author's right to write their story as they see it. It's very easy for the public to criticize what they don't really understand, yet benefit from.

There are many hours, days, weeks, years, tears, tantrums, and other emotions that go into producing this free service for entertainment purposes. It is not to be devalued based on a reader's ideal situation. So saying, if the story itself is bothering you, a simple 'thanks for writing' will suffice, and you don't have to complete the story. But please allow an author room to grow, and move within the storyline as THEY see fit. As for this story itself, the recently posted chapter explains just where the money came from, and as stated, it was still Justin's money. 

I hope that you continue to enjoy my work, all the way across the board. But if not, I will treasure the con-crit you gave me throughout your comments and grow from there.

Best Wishes,

~Nichelle

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 08, 2019 6:35 am Title: Chapter 31: ENEMY Part 2

Wow! The level of cuntiness of Lindsay is almost beyond believable. I wonder if they can bring the Salem Witch Trials to town for a main street execution?

I think Michael can kiss away his best friend status, and any hope of Brian coming to his rescue.

I was surprised it was the police station that Brian and Justin showed up at. I was sure it was Debbie's when Justin asked Brian why they were here.

It's going to be interesting to see where you take this with the whole Debbie/Mother arc. Since she has already left Michael to his own vices and gone off with Carl, I do have to wonder if she will stick to her guns, or if she will play 'My son is not responsible', once again.

HUGS ~Cathy

Reviewer: The SNO Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 07, 2019 4:41 pm Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD

I was hoping Debbie will finally admit that her son is guilty, but then, she is on her way to "absolve" him and blame Lindsay, even after what he just admitted!

She is beyond recovery (not sure it's the correct term though, but my English is not great today)!

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 07, 2019 2:40 pm Title: Chapter 25: THE BEAUTIFUL ONES: My Little Secret Part 2

OH! This was so good. I just love Daphne in this story. Knuckle sandwiches. Have at them, Doll. Oh., I can't wait for Ms. Slut to get what's coming to her! What a terrible, terrible person she is.

Michael... crap! He started to say that to Justin... well, it's a good thing Ted intervened. Michael would have brought charges against Justin. But Ted sure laid into him. You Go Ted! And then Michael thinking Ethank had a whine to his voice!?! Someone needs to tape Mikey and send him the recording!!! I'm surprised Clarence didn't say anything to him... hmm, maybe he's saving it for Lindsay.

Thank god for Clarence in regards to Lindsay! Nothing like having a vendetta against someone that is the cause of you losing your friend. Hell hath no fury... only this is not a woman scorned. This is by people she has used and abused. I CAN'T WAIT!!!!

HUGS  ~Cathy

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 07, 2019 11:39 am Title: Chapter 24: MY LITTLE SECRET

  IS ALL I HAVE TO SAY!!!! Did you ever hear of: WARNING! BRAIN BLEACH CHAPTER! READ AT YOUR OWN RISK!

Otherwise, I hope Justin deals well with everything, and I hope Brian remembers how it feels to be with Justin vs some nameless trick, and also remembers Dijon's wise words.

HUGS  ~Cathy

Reviewer: BritinDynasty Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 07, 2019 8:20 am Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD

It would had not come this far if Deb had realised how immature, whiny, manuplated Micheal is. Looks like she still not ready to see full mirror. Micheal raging, fuming is always a bliss. Great!

So glad to see your update. Kudos to your writing. Hugs ❤

Reviewer: BritinManor Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 07, 2019 7:15 am Title: Chapter 20.3 REFUGIO de AMOR (You Are My Home) the FIRST Date Part 3

I just read the three 'date' chapters. They were so perfect. You have a knack for writing the newness and awareness of them discovering love - or in Brian's case, the realization of it. The day and the evening was so exciting to read. Tears in a few places... the background you created for Brian. And yes, I can see him - for all his bravado - never trusting Lindsay or Michael with the revelation. I'm so happy he trusted Justin with it.

One of my guilty pleasures when reading QaF stories, is Justin remembering the prom. You wrote it beautifully. I could almost hear the 'awe' in Justin's voice when he said: I remember.

I'm so glad Dijon set Connor straight. What an arrogant sleaze. And I smile thinking of Brian's 'dressing down' to Connor. Touche!

And yes, the someone/someones are going to have the hell of a vicious blond before long.

Fantastic Story!

HUGS  ~Cathy

Reviewer: BlueMyst Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 07, 2019 12:05 am Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD

Deb needs to be in a cell right along with Michael, Lindsay, Craig and all the other cohorts she is just as bad as they are.

Cause she expects everyone to remain in their place and the moment they go against her demands she yells and bullies to get her way.

Michael isn't stupid he is just lazy and conniving when it comes to what he wants and needs Deb raised him to be a Spoiled Selfish, Inconsiderate Brat so she deserves to lose everything too.

Deb knows Michael isn't innocent but if she doesn't have to admit that he will is not to blame for his predicament then she isn't alone.

Too bad like Michael and Lindsay's plans it is backfiring Big Time and she has lost everyone who would've stood by her and helped her which is Her Fault.

Deflecting blame to Brian and Justin won't change the fact that Michael's hands aren't just covered in a little dirt but they are buried ten feet deep and will Never be clean again.

Talking to Lindsay won't change anything cause despite hearing the truth from Michael's own lips Deb will keep her head buried in the sand waiting for her baby to come home to her loving arms.

Deb doesn't understand love she just understands control which Michael learned at her knee.

Way To Go Ma!😡

Thanks For the Update 😃

 

 

Reviewer: YumYumPM Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 06, 2019 10:42 pm Title: CHAPTER 46: EVERYBODY WANTS TO RULE THE WORLD

I always thought parents were supposed to teach their children right from wrong, not just side with them no matter what.